Why wont you let me in?
I just want to help
But it seems the more i try,
the more u push me away.
I feel left out most of the time,
like if you dont want me here.
You try to hide it,
but i can see it in your eyes.
I'm going crazy trying to figure it out,
but it just confuses me more.
I want to know so i can help,
but you dont seem to want me to know.
I'm tired of asking
and you telling me nothing.
I dont know what to do,
it feels like im hurting you.
Do you not want me here?
Do you want me gone?
Please tell me so i can know
than, maybe, i would be less confused.
Why wont you let me in?
What are you afraid of?
Ummm... yea i know its not that good but thats why i posted it maybe someone can help me fix it or tell me whats wrong with it n stuff like that, ^-^
Its sad how true things can be.
I just got over a really hard relationship and this seems that this exact think is happening to me. I try to come back because I want to help and I want it all back, but I cant return. I read poetry because I know that other poeple have the same feelings as I do. I just like hearing it from other people.
Keep writing!
Thank you Lasura!My lover speaks; and he says, 'Arise my beloved my beautiful one and come!' -Song of Songs 2:10
Hmmm... is it the music I have in the font or (it's taking me into trans I think) or is this not that bad at all. I like it and I know how that feels therefore I did enjoy reading this.
It is odd, but that is the oddness I have in my poems too, so I don't know how to fix it obviously. It's like... the poem is too simple, the words are just too simple, the meaning just too easy to see. I really don't know how to fix it
Maybe just next time, try to hide what you want to say when you write, wrap it in fancy words and odd imaginery- that should help. ^^
I hope that helps a bit. But I really did like this poem and I will be looking forward for more! Cheers!
thnx for yalls comments and advice ill try to add some things to my next one ^-^.
Its sad how true things can be.
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