Why wouldn't you let me in?.. ()

*Rave_Grip* · Dec 04, 2007, 12:09 AM

I had you in my dreams

You were crying our heart out

You wouldn't let me in

Whenever I touched you

Yougave me that blank,confused look/face

My hands burnt because of the wall surrounding you

Then several other shadowy figures started to appear

Behind you, all of them males,

They lusted for you

Their evil looks, the saliva dripping from their mouths

I was chained down

I cried till I was crying blood

They grabbed you

I struggled

You didn't know what to do

My heart was imploding

You cried, I was a beast tied in a chain

Slowly, they started taking advantage of you

Whispering what theyhad said to you

And you had said to them

Before, now

"Am I loved by you?" They asked, you said yes...

[trapping you from your past and present]

I gave up, eyes bleeding

Heart stopping

As they ruined you

I couldn't help you out

I was dead inside

Why didn't youtell me

Why didn't you letme in ...

You laid there, helpless, intears, sweat ... blood

I walked over to you, holding onto you tightly

I woke up

I cried the moment I did

I don't want to loose you dammit

Why the hell don't you understand that?

... Tell me everything, let me in, before it is too late

I love you dammit, and honestly,
for as longas I am with you ...
I can't stand you loving another man ...

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Another ammeture poem bought to you by the wanna be poet.

*atomik_sprout* · Dec 04, 2007, 01:14 PM

Whoa! Very descriptive piece of work here!

Grammatical errors aside, this is kinda interesting. The whole, curiosity, jealousy, insecurity thing is a popular subject in the hearts and minds of humans. I like how you made your nightmare seem like it was so real. It's a bit dark for my tastes, but it's pretty good none-the-less.

Kudos!

*equinn* · Dec 04, 2007, 01:42 PM

aww rushil i know u 2 are great together and i donno why shes not letting u in i thought u guys were open?.....maybe not as much as i tought by reading this

but its a wonderful poem it will show her how much you really care for her and how much u wanna protect her in this life i hope it all works out ok and wonderful poem rushil i really injoyed readling it but not in a happy way its just i love to see you show your emotions

Dec 04, 2007, 12:09 AM	#1 (permalink)
Rave_Grip I hate idiots on AO. Kill Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Life is an illusion. Posts: 2,314 Thanks: 0 Thanked 11 Times in 11 Posts Credits: 14,876	Why wouldn't you let me in?.. () I had you in my dreams You were crying our heart out You wouldn't let me in Whenever I touched you Yougave me that blank,confused look/face My hands burnt because of the wall surrounding you Then several other shadowy figures started to appear Behind you, all of them males, They lusted for you Their evil looks, the saliva dripping from their mouths I was chained down I cried till I was crying blood They grabbed you I struggled You didn't know what to do My heart was imploding You cried, I was a beast tied in a chain Slowly, they started taking advantage of you Whispering what theyhad said to you And you had said to them Before, now "Am I loved by you?" They asked, you said yes... [trapping you from your past and present] I gave up, eyes bleeding Heart stopping As they ruined you I couldn't help you out I was dead inside Why didn't youtell me Why didn't you letme in ... You laid there, helpless, intears, sweat ... blood I walked over to you, holding onto you tightly I woke up I cried the moment I did I don't want to loose you dammit Why the hell don't you understand that? ... Tell me everything, let me in, before it is too late I love you dammit, and honestly, for as longas I am with you ... I can't stand you loving another man ... __________________________________________________ ___ Another ammeture poem bought to you by the wanna be poet. __________________ Wherever you see, there is always 98% of people who love something; and 2% that don't. I'm pretty sure that not ALL 98% of peeps don't support Lolita or anything. So if you agree, put it in your sig. \| .:~My AO Gallery~:. \| \| .:~The AO Rules~:. \|
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Dec 04, 2007, 01:14 PM	#2 (permalink)
atomik_sprout CHUCK NORRIS!!! Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Minneapolis, MN Posts: 2,087 Thanks: 55 Thanked 69 Times in 64 Posts Credits: 110,749	Re: Why wouldn't you let me in?.. () Whoa! Very descriptive piece of work here! Grammatical errors aside, this is kinda interesting. The whole, curiosity, jealousy, insecurity thing is a popular subject in the hearts and minds of humans. I like how you made your nightmare seem like it was so real. It's a bit dark for my tastes, but it's pretty good none-the-less. Kudos! __________________ http://www.myspace.com/boondocksamurai
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Dec 04, 2007, 01:42 PM	#3 (permalink)
equinn Ao's official cat girl~★ Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: Emerald island (Eire) (Ireland) Posts: 1,606 Thanks: 10 Thanked 19 Times in 19 Posts Credits: 16,466	Re: Why wouldn't you let me in?.. () aww rushil i know u 2 are great together and i donno why shes not letting u in i thought u guys were open?.....maybe not as much as i tought by reading this but its a wonderful poem it will show her how much you really care for her and how much u wanna protect her in this life i hope it all works out ok and wonderful poem rushil i really injoyed readling it but not in a happy way its just i love to see you show your emotions __________________
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