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    wild from the inside

    That’s inside that feels with fear
    that's burns the wildness from the inside out
    beginning more wildness
    as wild goes tough from body into the mind
    as it beginnings him on his knees
    cries out with pin the wild
    taking over his body
    his skin turns black
    his eyes turn white and red
    he try to calm the wildness
    but his wildness will not let him
    making claw marks on the ground
    feeling his skull
    feeling his ribs breaking
    waiting for his wildness to take over him
    seeing is hand and fingers changing at will
    he feeling his rage from inside
    as wild builds tough his body
    feeling his fangs ripping tough from his mouth
    now he knows the wildness will not leave him
    it never let him be he have wildness till he dies
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    Re: wild from the inside

    That is a pretty good poem. Keep up the good work.
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    Re: wild from the inside

    I think capitalization and punctuation would make the poem easier to read.
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    Re: wild from the inside

    Oh... now I see why the large stanza thing isn't really good.

    It's got a good theme, but the wording isn't doing it for me, nice try though.
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