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    Red face Will you help me with a title?

    As a child,
    If I would have known,
    That my spirit would be so broken now.

    That I would grieve,
    To nearly the point of death.
    Would I have ended it before it got this far?

    I was so young,
    When I made my mind up,
    Choosing him to be my image of perfection.

    I lost myself.
    Somewhere along the line.
    I see nothing, where I should see my own reflection

    If I could turn back the hands of time, Id tell myself
    "he will never treasure you the way you treasure him."
    Id hold myself close and say, "You've got to learn to love yourself.
    Spend a little less time trying to get under his skin

    Just love yourself.

    Get to know yourself."

    If I knew,
    When we were kissing.
    That I'd be the only one who wanted it to never end.

    Oh, If only I'd known
    That I'd end up here... wishing,
    And we'd end up being ever so much less.. than friends.

    If only I could shift the gears of life into reverse,
    I would recognize everything that I had to offer.
    Id ask myself "babygirl why don't you see how much you're worth?
    I see you stare in his eyes, but honey, please don't bother...

    Until you know yourself."

    Now I don't love myself....

    Is... it... to late???
    Last edited by Peach_follows; Mar 27, 2007 at 08:53 AM. Reason: Yep... it would be ME who leaves the "e" off of before
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    Re: Will you help me with a title?

    The first half was really interesting, and the title could be something like
    Lost Image
    or
    Lost between the lines.
    ^_^

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    Re: Will you help me with a title?

    Quote Originally Posted by Rave_Grip View Post
    The first half was really interesting, and the title could be something like
    Lost Image
    or
    Lost between the lines.
    ^_^
    Did the second half suck?

    And I really like "lost between the lines"... It perhaps would draw the reader in.... thank you.
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    Re: Will you help me with a title?

    No problem, I'm flooding with ideas but I'm glad you already like one
    The second half didn't suck, it was something like...
    - O_O - ^_^ - o_o - ~_~

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    Re: Will you help me with a title?

    I could feel the emotion. Nice job. I believe many readers here can relate to the subject.
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