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Thread: Wings

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    Wings

    Through my battles
    I have gained these wings
    Through my triumphs
    I have gained this strength

    Alone I achieve
    Alone I walk
    Alone I've become as hard as rock

    I can go where I please
    Beneath the open sky
    But with these wings
    I can never fly


    That's my first AO poem

    Please tell me what you thought of it.


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    Re: Wings

    very good words used in your poem alot of energy into the poem makes me want to see more great job very nice indeed♥~*The Princess*~♥
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    Re: Wings

    I thought for a moment that this would be a poll on chicken wings, but I was pleasantly surprised by this poem. Reminds me of how I feel about things. Alone I achieve, Alone I walk, Alone I've become hard as rock.......I'll keep that part of the poem in my memory for a long time.
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    Re: Wings

    I was surprised by a few things in this poem... one was that it appears all the words are spelled properly... and two... there was no slang in it... now... aside from being surprised... I loved this... very short... it conveys it's point in a few lines so I don't spend ten minutes reading it... and it appeared to me that it had a darker tone in it... which made it better... it has the sound of happiness caused from acheivement combined with that dark, lonely feeling of breaking your back, along with shedding blood and tears to get to that point... in short... this was a very well thought out poem... good job...
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    Re: Wings

    i thought it was alright as far as i know
    everything was spelled right which is
    rare to come by but as far as poem
    wise i thought it was ok event though
    im not that big of a fan for unryhming
    poem

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