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    Wings of Elegance

    Wings of Elegance

    Born of the Earth, yet does not live upon its face,
    You spread your wings and fly,
    You remained there all these years,
    For you belonged with the wind,

    I yearned for that flight,
    A creature of the land,
    At every dusk till dawn, I stayed in the tree that reached for the stars,
    That’s when I saw you,

    Wings of elegance in flight,
    Many a times I called out to you,
    Many a nights you had not heard,
    I was not in loneliness, for I had you to look upon,

    You came to me,
    Grabbed my hand and took me in flight,
    My heart found love for you,
    I met your kind, but without wings I didn’t belong,

    That night I gave in,
    I smiled and said, “Thank you for the gift of flight,
    So short, yet so beautiful,
    And I can now live knowing that,

    “Now leave me here,
    For I am a creature who belongs to the land,
    Spread your wings and fly!”
    You left me and the Earth soaked up my tears,

    I hadn’t come back to that tree,
    For I feared the pain come again,
    But one night I found you on my doorstep,
    “Why, my dear, hadn’t you come?”

    You smiled and I fell into your arms,
    Though, something was missing,
    I turned to look,
    And your wings were gone.
    Thank you Lasura!
    My lover speaks; and he says, 'Arise my beloved my beautiful one and come!' -Song of Songs 2:10

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    Re: Wings of Elegance

    wow, self sacrifice for the gift of love. the poem flows really well and i like the story being told. this must have taken you awhile to write this.

    Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra

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    Re: Wings of Elegance

    I like the point behind the poem. However, the punctuation throws the flow off for me.
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    Re: Wings of Elegance

    **shrieks** You posted it!!!! Yay!!!! I'm sooooooooo happy!!!!! I really love this poem!!!!! Wonderful job!!!!!!! It makes me want to cry!!!!

    DEMON SPAWN IS AWESOME!!!!! XP

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    Re: Wings of Elegance

    o o o

    a story telling poem.

    It was loving. >.<ll what do I say to that?!!

    The ending was smooth~
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    Re: Wings of Elegance

    Thanks Mr K. And it was free-writing so it was just something I cooked up..
    Thank you Lasura!
    My lover speaks; and he says, 'Arise my beloved my beautiful one and come!' -Song of Songs 2:10

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    Re: Wings of Elegance

    AWWWWWWW ..................................... that was really good!

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    Re: Wings of Elegance

    awww that's was awsome i loved it (see i'm talkin to you )
    “If I were the rain that binds together the earth and the sky, whom in all mingle, would I be able to bind two hearts together?”- Orinime Inoue

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