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    Winter

    Winter
    cut close, cut cold

    this chill cuts the flesh
    and saws down through the bone.

    run deep, run red

    this blood runs through the vein
    and freezes thick in the heart.

    fall hard, fall far

    this snow falls on the lips
    and blisters the delicate skin.

    My love, my winter, will last forever.
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    Re: Winter

    Wow Gren! I love it!

    It's so nice. It has an eerie feeling all throughout it. It's short, and has such a deep feeling. Winter, your love.

    I enjoyed it very much! Keep it up, gren.

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    Re: Winter

    nyahehehe, cool man! so cold but warm eh?
    short, direct to the point..
    what aboout summer? hehehe jk jk

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    Re: Winter

    I had a few lines from this bouncing around in my head for a couple of days, and I finally got around to writing it down.

    I'm toying with a new style here (new for me, anyway); I tried it once before in a poem I wrote for a class, and I really liked the end result. Maybe I'll post that one sometime, I think it was the best piece I've ever written.
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    Re: Winter

    Yes I agree, the style was very interesting! I love how you made it short and sweet. One of favs Great job!

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    Re: Winter

    Well, keep on doing whatever you're doing. At first, I didnt like the wording. But as I continued to read? It grew on me. Awesome job at creating the tone.
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    Re: Winter

    yeah .. agree with kasai...

    i like it very much...
    really short and straight to the point..

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    Re: Winter

    Thanks, all. It's always encouraging to get positive feedback. I used to write regularly, but somehow got out of the habit. Picking it up again makes me realize how much I enjoy it.
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