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    Winter Flower

    I begin to bloom with the daisy
    Welling up with emotion daily,
    How far I am going grow,
    With the seasons, in the snow.

    As my heart shoots out to the sky
    I long to take up root and fly
    Just a bud during winter,
    A flower comes from a cinder.

    Having a heart is for those who know
    That emotions tend to grow
    Out of love that springs from within
    Until a lawnmower kills your next of kin.

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    Re: Winter Flower

    Very sweet. Don't focus so much on rhyming. Sometimes metre is more important. But sweet, very sweet.

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    Re: Winter Flower

    Lol. I thought hte rhyme was executed wonderfully. And I love the ending.
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    Re: Winter Flower

    It was a very sweet poem. I liked the beggining. Good work and I look forward to reading your next one.
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    Re: Winter Flower

    It's a very cute poem.
    It flowed well and told a bit of story.
    I enjoyed reading... very well done.

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    Re: Winter Flower

    It's brilliant~ and it tells a life story~ I like it nice and simple~

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    Re: Winter Flower

    Very impressive.Good rhyme,poem flows well and nice choice of words.

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    Re: Winter Flower

    First of all... I love the ending. It made me laugh. The whole poem was good though, and I re-read it again because I liked it so much. Good job... Can't wait to read the next one.

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