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Diamond in the Rough | Winter Flower I begin to bloom with the daisy Welling up with emotion daily, How far I am going grow, With the seasons, in the snow. As my heart shoots out to the sky I long to take up root and fly Just a bud during winter, A flower comes from a cinder. Having a heart is for those who know That emotions tend to grow Out of love that springs from within Until a lawnmower kills your next of kin. |
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![]() ![]() Credits: 59,274 | Re: Winter Flower Very sweet. Don't focus so much on rhyming. Sometimes metre is more important. But sweet, very sweet.
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![]() ![]() Credits: 2,336 | Re: Winter Flower It was a very sweet poem. I liked the beggining. Good work and I look forward to reading your next one.
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![]() ![]() Credits: 1,497 | Re: Winter Flower The poem flowed smoothly and the rhyming does not hinder the reader for understanding the whole poem. Imagery was really good too. keep up the good work
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![]() ![]() Credits: 1,176 | Re: Winter Flower I agree with raja on this one the overall poem is wonderful! Keep up the excellent work!
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