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    Winter Rose

    If life had a beginning
    Then it should have an end
    And since it has a last part it must’ve started somehow,
    But you never know where it will lead you.

    People ignore the slightest hint of happiness
    They never know what inspiration they might get
    Let it be a winter rose alone in the snow
    Its splendor and blush always stand out.

    If sadness didn’t exist then happiness won’t have any meaning
    One is the opposite creation of other
    Yet it’s always in a balance
    Use them as you energy, as your motivation

    Life is full of miseries, But,
    Humanity shines brightest under inhumane conditions
    Wherever you might be, or what you're going through...
    Get mad, stand up for yourself
    Cry as much as you can, eat and sleep whenever you want

    Live. Live. Live.

    You won’t feel that pain in your chest
    Unless you’re breathing your last
    You’ll know then, how much a four lettered word matters
    It will be the same time when you’ll want to live the most

    Everyone comes empty handed
    And they will leave the same way
    But what counts is how much you filled
    Your irreplacable time with

    The rose was shredding her fine petals
    She closed her eyes slowly
    “A small pain in my chest is all”
    She said with a smile brighter than the sunrays

    But what is a small pain in her chest
    Compared to the huge tear in my heart?
    No need to cry ...
    No matter how held I close she was turning cold

    You will excel as long as you have memories
    But how long will you live with them?
    My time would come sooner or later
    All I know, is that the winter rose blossomed

    And would remind me of the flower I held so close in my arms.

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    Re: Winter Rose

    Great poem Rave the only suggestion I would make is to reword this line "No matter how held I close she was turning cold" if I may make another suggestion try changing it to "She was turning cold no matter how close I held her." That is my suggestion but still an awesome poem! Keep up the good work Rave!

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    Re: Winter Rose

    It was long i can tell you that. At first I didn't really get it until i read the second part then I got it. It's good. different than what I am used to but good. The last line was sad.
    every rose has a thorn

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    Re: Winter Rose

    So u right poems too Rave and do sigs multi tasking are we lol

    but eny way i liked it long tho but me like
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    Re: Winter Rose

    wow this poem was awesome! nothing like I have read before and I would like to learn to write like that! It is really deep and it kinda has a story to it. I really like it!
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    Re: Winter Rose

    Hmm. This was a good read. The first stanza brought me in and the rest kept me interested. nice job.
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    Re: Winter Rose

    I'm glad to one of your poems . This is a really good one. Ine line didn't make scense though. The one about holg her. Well I really liked it though it was long. But I hope to see you rawsome work agin.(^.^)

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    Re: Winter Rose

    It's really good...and sort of sad but really interesting..

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