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    Wish upon a star...

    When i was little
    i thought a star
    would bring joy and happiness
    but i think i went to far.

    I still wonder
    about the wish I made
    did it ever come true
    or did it just fade.

    See I still wish on star
    hoping about
    if dream will come true
    without a doubt.

    Holiday season came
    presents everywhere.
    I wonder if I see mine
    but where...........

    W
    I
    S
    H
    On

    A




    STAR
    Yeah, Bye.

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    Re: Wish upon a star...

    That was a rather good poem although I did feel it lacked something. Is it ok if make a suggestion?

    Rather than having the words per line at the end, turn this poem into an Acrostic poem where each letter of the first line spells out Wish on a star. Of course you don't have to alter the number of rows in the stanza. Look at the one I created it might help you understand.Always
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    Re: Wish upon a star...

    Thank you very much sazzy. I try to do my best with poems but i know im not good but thanks though^^
    Yeah, Bye.

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    Re: Wish upon a star...

    I didn't mean my comment to put you down, just wanted to see what you thought of the idea. Its still a great poem

    You may think that you are not good at writing poems but you are. The fact you still write them shows your creative side and that is a good thing
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    Re: Wish upon a star...

    oh...THANK YOU^-^. it means alot and i appreciate your thoughts and your suggestions about it. thank you. i will try to make one like that as soon as i can think of one lol.
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    Re: Wish upon a star...

    aww it was a sweet poem^^ maybe next time make it longer? but u did a great job!
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    Re: Wish upon a star...

    ok well thank you though^^ thanks everyone ^-^
    Yeah, Bye.

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