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This poem is great, zombie#47! i was interested in this poem. the rhyming does not hinder the essence of the poem. i would like to suggest capitalizations in the beginning of every line.
Witch
have the courage to take your life
become forever the devils wife
strike your name form the book of life
slice your wrists with a kitchen knife
your sinful greed, your lust, your pride
is what makes you the devils bride
that crimson ring upon your hand
in hell you'll become wife and man
your sins on earth have made you blind
this contract you signed you cant unbind
....your eternity is mine.
--so guess there's nothing left to but tell me what you think.
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zombie click
This poem is great, zombie#47! i was interested in this poem. the rhyming does not hinder the essence of the poem. i would like to suggest capitalizations in the beginning of every line.
Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^
Very nice poem, i like the rhymes at the end of each sentences.
Raja is absolutely right. the use of rhymes does not create a bad flow. Instead, the flow of your poem was beautiful. As well as capitalization, punctuation would be nice.
Seduced by Flesh
well thank you all, thats just one more thing to work out in my next poem.
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i thought it was cool... very interesting... very... sinister?^^ haha no, really, nice job here... but I must agree on the punctuation thing...
They say you can't use oversized signatures here on AO.
very nice love the poem
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! lol
sweet i love this poem it rocks. It really speaks to me
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