BlueFox1

A wolf’s last Cry


Deep in the forest what do you see?
I see wolf standing close to his family.
You hear the howl as the pack beings to move
For in each wolf the spirit moves.

They strike fear in hearts of their prey
Watch as each wolf makes his way.
The race is on to kill and survive
The prey’s soul leaves never to be revived.

As they gather around and begin to eat
One wolf drops as he is becoming weak.
For in this hunt a fatal blow
As leaves rustle around and the wind howls low.

As the wolves look around they begin to morn.
For the leader of the pack soul has been torn.
His paws are blood stained, weary and worn
Like the flesh being ripped by a thorn.

Away from the body his soul must flee
Into a place of darkness and eternal rivalry.
As each wolf steps up and howls resound
Within each heart a new vengeance is found.

So begins a new hunt with the new leader found
Never forgetting the pain that was found
For when the old leader fell and new one stepped in
A new hunt for vengeance soon began.


Not one of my better poems. Please give honest comments on how I could improve this one!

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Shinigami's_Angel

I thought it was very good Fox! I liked it alot. And the wolf theme was awesome!

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Made by- Ryomakurosaki (Thank you sooooo much!!) ^__^

BlueFox1

Yeah but it still sucked! It wasn't one of my better poems! But thank you for the compliement Angel!

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HolderOfTheDarkChalice

i cant really find anything wrong but for a few missspelled words
other than that this poem was very cool,and i liked how you desribed
dow the pack changed leader's wich i thought might come from you being
in the army,i could be wrong but thats what i got from it. and it worked
out awesome.

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BlueFox1

Thanks Bro! I tried but I'm actually Air Force, but still the same concept! Thanks for the compliment and I'll try not to let you or Shinigami's Angel down with any of my future writings!

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Yippy123

Waa i thought it was great! There was a nice flow throughout the poem and also had good rhyming couplet thingies cool descriptive words u used cos the reader can then easily picture it in their head.