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    A Wolf's Last Cry

    A wolf’s last Cry


    Deep in the forest what do you see?
    I see wolf standing close to his family.
    You hear the howl as the pack beings to move
    For in each wolf the spirit moves.

    They strike fear in hearts of their prey
    Watch as each wolf makes his way.
    The race is on to kill and survive
    The prey’s soul leaves never to be revived.

    As they gather around and begin to eat
    One wolf drops as he is becoming weak.
    For in this hunt a fatal blow
    As leaves rustle around and the wind howls low.

    As the wolves look around they begin to morn.
    For the leader of the pack soul has been torn.
    His paws are blood stained, weary and worn
    Like the flesh being ripped by a thorn.

    Away from the body his soul must flee
    Into a place of darkness and eternal rivalry.
    As each wolf steps up and howls resound
    Within each heart a new vengeance is found.

    So begins a new hunt with the new leader found
    Never forgetting the pain that was found
    For when the old leader fell and new one stepped in
    A new hunt for vengeance soon began.


    Not one of my better poems. Please give honest comments on how I could improve this one!

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    Re: A Wolf's Last Cry

    I thought it was very good Fox! I liked it alot. And the wolf theme was awesome!
    Made by- Ryomakurosaki (Thank you sooooo much!!) ^__^

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    Re: A Wolf's Last Cry

    Yeah but it still sucked! It wasn't one of my better poems! But thank you for the compliement Angel!

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    Re: A Wolf's Last Cry

    i cant really find anything wrong but for a few missspelled words
    other than that this poem was very cool,and i liked how you desribed
    dow the pack changed leader's wich i thought might come from you being
    in the army,i could be wrong but thats what i got from it. and it worked
    out awesome.
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: A Wolf's Last Cry

    Thanks Bro! I tried but I'm actually Air Force, but still the same concept! Thanks for the compliment and I'll try not to let you or Shinigami's Angel down with any of my future writings!

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    Re: A Wolf's Last Cry

    Waa i thought it was great! There was a nice flow throughout the poem and also had good rhyming couplet thingies cool descriptive words u used cos the reader can then easily picture it in their head.

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