Words Can

Words can't describe
This pain I have inside
To throw my life away
Never to live another day

Words can't describe
The suffering behind the bribe
I gave everything for love's sake
But your love was just fake

Words can't describe
How I felt when you lied
And I knew you were lying
I couldn't stop crying

Words can't describe
What I see when I close my eyes
Visions of a broken dream
All the words I didn't mean

Words can't describe
All the ****ing times
I fell into your traps
I just wanna twist your neck til it snaps

Words can't describe
The day I saw you die
It was the first time I smiled
It has been awhile

Words can't describe
The joy I have inside
To take your life away
Never to live another day





Can someone change the title to Words Can't Describe... the enter button was stuck...

Hmm. I actually like the rhyming. I just think he stanzas couldve been more full.

Its lovely. I like the rhyming also. Keep it up

The ryhme scheme is excellent, just elaborate a little more on stanzas, but good job keep working on your skill!:thumb:

its a great poem Solking :) i liked it....i liked the bit about twisting you neck till it snaps....sorry it just stood out to me thats all.

I thought it was an amusing and interesting poem. The words and lines flowed smoothly and got me through to the end without having to stop and think. I also like how the ending turned out, how the poem's story progressed to its end. It's different, that I can say. If you can write with the same smoothness of lines using other themes, I think that would be also great, since your writing seems to have a grip to a reader such as myself, and you can work that to your advantage. Just keep the poems coming, and a unique theme once in a while will definitely make you stand out and keep you challenged. That's just my opinion.

Nice one solking, i never thought that you were good at writting kool poems. Keep it up man.

Its a bit difficult for me to consistently write poems. I'll take everyone's advice one the stanzas (looks up stanza on wikipedia) and other things that were mentioned.