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    in this world

    you think your smart
    your not

    it's plain fantasy
    that you want me to fall

    it's killing me
    that you got it all

    the jury
    is coming to judge you
    instead of me

    so what you got
    one last shot

    it seems to me
    you won't need it

    because you've already got a goal

    me and myself see hell
    through eyes that do not lie

    there is nothing here left
    for me to collect

    why don't you fall out
    so i can fill out
    the space i left

    in this world there is nothing for me
    no place for me

    and you
    only make things,,,,,
    more worse and horrible

    i am stuck in this world
    nothing waiting for me

    i am stuck in this world
    lonely and fading

    nothing for me
    no hate nor love

    nothing,,,,
    there is pure nothingness around me,,,,,,,,,,,

    in this world
    i am alone
    dying
    and fading
    Power -xxx- aka -M.Ali
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    I Spread My Wings Without A trace

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    Re: in this world

    Nice breaks, now elaborate. And you can combine two stanzas to make a four verse stanza. That would be more pleasing to the eye.
    Seduced by Flesh


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    Re: in this world

    awesome poem man, although when you read it it sounds more like a song, but still pretty good, keep it up man.

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