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    This world

    I wake up in a world blanketed in snow
    No clouds to be seen
    no warm sun to sweat under
    This is a world of great lengths
    A world of great mystery

    In this world we see what we SEE
    Yet it's not what's really there
    We hear what we Hear
    Yet we hear no truth

    This is a world of great hate
    but has a lot of love to share
    A dominant place
    or so we would like to believe

    We live in a world of mystery
    A world of lies
    A world of wonders

    I wake up in this world today and I think
    "Is this paradise?"
    "or is it our hell?"
    Only I could imagine the world and see it as is
    Only I could look at the world and see life

    It's through these eyes
    That I see the world as a whole.

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    Re: This world

    We live in a world of mystery
    A world of lies
    A world of wonders

    The only thing I see with this poem is the fourth stanza is a little short. Overall I think that you conveyed you thoughts very well and truthfully speaking the one who can see the world as paradise or hell is the one who is willing to step outside their shell and pursue life with No Fear! Nice job 59wayz!

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    Re: This world

    Indeed, this is a very nice poem!

    I happen to think this is the best one you've put up on AO so far. I like how you used the snow to state that people only see what they see and not what's truly there. Very good. ^_^

    Kudos!!! ~S


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