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    A World of Glass

    A world of glass
    Fragile and free
    So easy to see
    So easy to envy

    A world of glass
    Cracking under the strain
    Of years of neglect
    Anger and pain

    A world of glass
    Shattered and fall in
    Shards of a life
    Trying to rebuild

    A world of glass
    Built up anew
    Shards of a old
    Embedded in the new
    When you walk away
    You don't hear me say please. Oh baby, don't go
    Simple and clean is the way that you're making me feel tonight. It's hard to let it go

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    Re: A World of Glass

    My goodness, this was an okay poem. The flow was pretty and the rhyming gave it a nice little ring. Good job. The only thing "wrong" with it would be that the wording in the thid stanza has a little grammatical error.
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