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    this is the world through my eyes

    My life is like sorrow,
    Empty and vage,
    I feel like this.

    Day after day,
    And no one understands,
    My thoughts inside.

    And sometimes I wish I just could die,
    The world never saw me,
    As a normal person.

    The only thing it sees is a dead body,
    Not moving or living,
    Just standing there.

    As well as other people,
    You are aware,
    The world is cold.

    Empty and dark,
    I knew this right from the start,
    The world is black just as my heart...

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    Re: this is the world through my eyes

    Good poem. I love the last stanza.

    Quote Originally Posted by flaminghate
    Empty and dark,
    I knew this right from the start,
    The world is black just as my heart...
    Sometimes I've felt like my heart should be as cold as the world is to me. Good write, as usual. Keep it up!

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    Re: this is the world through my eyes

    zomg!
    How can you create so much?!
    Wow, you really must be on a roll
    Which is totally awesome!
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    GOOD JOB!

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    Re: this is the world through my eyes

    Very good poem. It sounded like a poem about someone who feels so alone that if they dissapeared none would miss them. Good job and I'm sure your next one will be good too.
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    Re: this is the world through my eyes

    y'know, I really like your work- ALOT. I feel like I can relate... even if you don't believe me.
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    Re: this is the world through my eyes

    I guess most of us can relate to this.. It's a poem well done with feelings of sadness that one has put in~ NicE onE!

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