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    Writers Ambition


    Constantly blocked by thought of reality
    Inspiration tries to run through my mind
    My pen begins to move and words start to flow
    Words and phrases pieced together to make a poem

    You never see me out there doing my own thing
    Only at home with my book and pen
    The only thing you would begin to think
    Is poor boy all he does is work

    Each line laced and formed with my emotions
    In hopes of trying to execute each line perfectly
    Keeping and open mind for new thoughts and ideas
    Comments and critiques come from each one of my peers

    From thought of lost love to poems of joy
    To feelings of darkness and words of grief
    Every second spent searching my mind
    With the dream of ambition as my guide

    I had some help from my buddy fma1012 on this one and I just want to say thank you for helping me!

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    Re: Writer's Ambition

    Hmm. I like the subject of the poem. the wording could have used some rhetorical devices. Other than that? Good job.
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    Re: Writer's Ambition

    very awesome poem and this is exactly how poems
    are made and how you put it in your own words is very
    cool , your getting better bro keep it up
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Thanks for the comments Bro and Kasai! I truly appreciate it and Kasai I tried to write this one without a rhyme scheme and I think that you are right retorical devices would've been fine in this.

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    Lol I can't believe I didn't see this one ^^;; sorry. But I think you did an awesome job it totally shows how much a poet would do for poems like these. Good job. ^_^


    Thanks lifeforce! (:

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    Hey Buddy! Thanks for the awesome comment! I really appreciate and thank you for your help on this particular poem! fma1012 YOU ROCK!!!

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    Nice poem you got there Bluefox1! Thats exactly the same as what i think when writing something,the whole poem itself are completely related to each other...

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    what up i am a new member and i guess i can get straight to the point. i am looking for sword of the berserk DVDs. i am in San Diego and i can't find none of them. i need all seasons. But other than that fee l free to reply with anything else. PEACE!

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