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    the wrong way to heaven

    Some people no the choices they make.
    the lives they lead
    the roads they take.
    they go left
    when thay should go right.
    they turn away
    from gods guiding light.
    they don't reach out
    and grab his helping hand.
    they hesitate.
    so, alone they stand
    or at least they think.
    he's watching over them
    day and night
    hopeing on the day they get it right.
    till then, how he sees it
    they'er walking the wrong way
    to heaven.

    my first happy one

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    Re: +wrong way to heaven+

    good................but if that was ur first happy one...........how sad are th others?

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    Re: +wrong way to heaven+

    Some people no the choices they make.
    I think you ment Know,

    Dispite the correction, I thought this was a weel put together poem,
    I do look forward how you are going to put your next work together!
    Keep it up! !

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    Re: +wrong way to heaven+

    my other ones r pritty depresing just look

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    Re: +wrong way to heaven+

    Quote Originally Posted by just_an_awful_dream
    they go left
    when thay should go right.
    that's awesome, i like this line!


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    Re: +wrong way to heaven+

    definetly your best one yet (at least that i've seen)
    You laugh at me because I'm different. I laugh at you because your all the same.

    Thanks Hieislove for the siggy!

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    Re: +wrong way to heaven+

    Wow did someone inspire this poem? I think it is really great!!!!For real...I suport your Poems all the way!!!!!!! good or bad

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