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Newbie | tell me what you think here i waste away today i am cold and lonely in the dark i wait here tucked and hidden away, away from words that cut without a mark i wait here for many an hour waiting for words to that will never come every day becomes more dire waiting for that which is apparent in some all these chains that bind my vanity these feelings that set my soul apart i wither away to struggle with my sanity all this you'll see with an X-Ray of my heart
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![]() ![]() Credits: 59,197 | Re: X-Ray of my Heart Punctuation and capitalization might help those of us reading this. Also, don't focus so much on rhyming that your metre goes off. Beyond that, I really like this poem, particularly the last stanza.
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![]() ![]() Credits: 7,812 | Re: X-Ray of my Heart i dont agree wit divine im onna rap site called goldmic and ppl caps the rhymin words but in poetry, its the simplicity that stands out ur x-ray idea was good, but it could have a broader meaning ![]()
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