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Reply With QuotePunctuation and capitalization might help those of us reading this. Also, don't focus so much on rhyming that your metre goes off. Beyond that, I really like this poem, particularly the last stanza.
X-Ray of my Heart tell me what you think
here i waste away today
i am cold and lonely in the dark
i wait here tucked and hidden away,
away from words that cut without a mark
i wait here for many an hour
waiting for words to that will never come
every day becomes more dire
waiting for that which is apparent in some
all these chains that bind my vanity
these feelings that set my soul apart
i wither away to struggle with my sanity
all this you'll see with an X-Ray of my heart
The brighter a light shines, the thicker the shadows fall
Punctuation and capitalization might help those of us reading this. Also, don't focus so much on rhyming that your metre goes off. Beyond that, I really like this poem, particularly the last stanza.
i dont agree wit divine
im onna rap site called goldmic and ppl caps the rhymin words
but in poetry, its the simplicity that stands out
ur x-ray idea was good, but it could have a broader meaning
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