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    Yesterday...

    As the night shadows fall,
    things were once a good day,
    ...but that was yesterday
    At a once good place to laugh and play,
    ...but that was yesterday,
    The wire came in,
    I was gone you need to be here,
    ...but that was yesterday,
    Now I stand within a mile of home,
    yesterday was the day,
    oh, that was yesterday,
    the empty shadows fell,
    that was just today,
    completely different from what was yesterday,
    but alas...
    that was yesterday,
    just another day,
    but that was yesterday...
    I've seen all you here before at the rise and the fall, lets go down and ring the bell at the Levity Ball.

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    Re: Yesterday...

    Nice poem! Hope to see more of your work. Your really good at it so keep up the good work.
    「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」

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    Re: Yesterday...

    I really liked this. I liked yesterday too.*wink* keep up the good work!
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    Re: Yesterday...

    wow...thats good.

    all happend yestrday....hahaha

    any way keep the good work!!

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    wow, all of this credit for just a 10 minute thing that I did at late at night, but thank you all, and was there any thing that I could have done to make it better?
    I've seen all you here before at the rise and the fall, lets go down and ring the bell at the Levity Ball.

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    Re: Yesterday...

    I enjoyed this poem. The repetition of the phrase "that was yesterday" kept it going for me. I like repetition in some poems and this would be one of them. I look forward to reading more! Keep them coming! ^_^

    What is today but tomorrow's yesterday? ^_^

    Come dance in the rain with me, no one is watching.

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    Re: Yesterday...

    Ooh la la! Great work kid! Mm, from what I read, of course there's always room for improvement but hell it's good.

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