Way to vent your frustration/pain, Alondra! I can relate to your poem (only a little bit though, our situations are slightly different). The structure is a bit... blah (for a lack of better words), and you kinda made this in to a run-on sentence. You're missing mad periods and commas, but it's still an okay piece of writing--grammatical errors aside.
Good to see you releasing your emotions in a good way. I hope to read more poems--if ya got 'em in ya--and I'm sure hoping to see some punctuation next time around, LOL.