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    You

    I still can't believe it's true
    I'm finally with you
    It's always been a struggle
    Finding the right time
    Now it's a matter of forever
    We could stay together
    When did this happen
    When did we meet
    Everything's just a blur
    You're my boy I choose
    You're the friend I hope I never lose
    Because of you I've grown
    It may not be love
    but you've shown me heart
    I was once scared and hurt
    Now you've dusted me off
    I'm ready to stand again
    I know it's cheesy
    but I owe it all to you
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    Wow, besides the part about being a nerd, which REALLY threw me off, that was amazing. I'd have to say get rid of that line;
    I recall thinking you a nerd
    Now you've proved me wrong
    It's something quite common
    And it'd be totally awesome in my eyes. I know exactly where that's all coming from, and I know how you feel when you write something like that. It's a beautiful feeling knowing someone out there is thinking about you isn't it. It may not rhyme, and it may not be wordy, but it's straight and simple. Very very good. I hope to see more works from you in the future.
    Writing is life again.

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    Re: You

    Yeah! Woot. Woot, as my friends at school would say.

    Sorry, but when I read the part about them being your boo, I kinda cracked up.

    It's probably because at my school we don't refer to people as being ours or anyone else's boo..

    Other than that, sorry for critisizing. I can't stand it when people do it.

    Guess I'm a hypocrite. But other than all of that, sweet buns on the poem!

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    Re: You

    Quote Originally Posted by Red_Wings
    Yeah! Woot. Woot, as my friends at school would say.

    Sorry, but when I read the part about them being your boo, I kinda cracked up.

    It's probably because at my school we don't refer to people as being ours or anyone else's boo..

    Other than that, sorry for critisizing. I can't stand it when people do it.

    Guess I'm a hypocrite. But other than all of that, sweet buns on the poem!


    Haha, I guess you have to be from the ghetto to kinda enjoy that word. S'all good.

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