The sadness is everywhere ,
can you see it?
The pain is for free and no one care's,
can you feel it?
The tear's flow freely as the people walk by,
did you notice?
The bullet sings out in the night another child died,
do you care?
All thing's said , never once a does a head
turn in concern.
All things felt , not once did a hand try to stop
All thing's flowing,not a single shoulder was
was given to them.
All things cold,not a single rose was toss'ed
on that nice wooden box.
When the time for you're sadness comes,
will they see you?
When your pain is great ,will anyone walking
by care ?
When you're tears flow, did anyone notice
you siting there in you're dispair?
When that bullt take's you're life will
anyone offer you a rose?
I liked this.. t'was.. interesting.. had much meaning and depth.. keep it up ^.^
thank you i am glad you liked it i actually tried following the
rules but not sire i did for this poem, but i tried anyway.
and the poem really did have a lot of meaning in it and i
hope i can do this good again sometime
bah.. poetry shouldn't have rules.. its poetry.. comes from the heart.. not the mind.. though do heed grammar so that others may understand what your message is ^.^.
(Not commenting on the poem.. just a statement to the world)
thats cool thanks and your right but i sort of had to struggle with the
spelling lol j/k but i di have fun while doing it i mean why do something you
Exactly ... though to many people take poetry to seriously.. but then again.. maby I'm in the wrong for NOT taking it seriously.. eh heh.. but I DO have pieces that are serious.. so yeah.. just depends on your mood and state of mind perhaps.
Awesome Poem! The meaning and emotion are great! It makes you think who out there in the world really cares about you. I like the imagery given in this poem.
Oustanding job Bro!
glad you liked man and got the imagry i ws going for that in this one,
and yea i was going for the thought of who realy cares after the day is done,
its really a good question i think