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    For you

    The sky wouldn't seem,
    so sad tonight...
    that is,
    if I didn't miss you so.

    The clouds wouldn't seem,
    so dark and grey....
    that is,
    if I didn't miss you so.

    The night wouldn't seem,
    so cold and empty.
    that is,
    if I didn't miss you so.

    The rain drops pouring,
    from the black clouds.
    The meteors crashing,
    into my soul.

    This joy in my heart,
    matched with lonliness.
    I'm not sad,
    but my smile is not there yet.

    I know that within hours,
    I'll get moments of your words.
    Love waits,
    forever if need be.

    Love is what is in me,
    yet I'm still needing you now.
    I'll be ok soon,
    I know this.

    I will be ok,
    and be smiling again.
    I know you'll keep me,
    until you return again.

    And if you don't return,
    like you promised,
    then I'll remember,
    that you said forever.

    You're not like the others,
    that left me in this cold,
    as my hands stay in my,
    ice colored hoodie.

    You're different,
    and loving and true.
    And yes it took a bit,
    but I do love you.

    So I'll stand in the cold,
    as long as I can.
    smile when I need to,
    and be your loving man.

    Just make sure that you keep,
    what you say....
    then I'll love you in,
    every single way.

    You want me?
    You need me?
    Then prove it here,
    with this.

    Come in the rain,
    and sink your body against me.
    Kiss me here,
    and kiss me lovingly.

    Let not the cold,
    nor the rain,
    nor the darkness,
    keep you from me.

    I'll be here,
    you know where.
    Where I'll always be...
    find me.


    -White Rose-

    Far be it for me to be anything special, when the only special thing I desire with me, is the special person I share my gifts with.

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    Re: For you

    Love poetry. Mmm-mm, baked fresh.

    Tiny bits on the grammar and spelling area. Not too bad I may say.

    The poem reminded me of my own Love poetry written a while back. But.. it just turned to what it was, poetry and nothing more.

    But I still mused at yours and on the inside smiled at your love. I just couldn't get a flow with it.


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    Aww.......this is really sweet.....and very poetic and romantic.........
    I really like how you kept repeating the last line..........it added your own unique style to the poem.....
    Great job!!!!!!!
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    Re: For you

    I LOVE YOU JUSTIN!!!

    That was so beautiful. So romantic. As usual, your words wre filled with immense amounts of passion and love that couldn't be measured in depth even if one could try. I loved it!


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    Re: For you

    OMy! That was so cute! Joo are such a sweet guy! Go, Justin! Sweet words, btw. Well, what do I expect from a sweet guy? LOL... Well, hope to read more of your lovely works!

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