To You

Kiani Haki22 · May 21, 2008, 02:54 PM

I look into your eye's
I see your beautiful soul
I look at your warming smile
I feel a flutter with in my heart

I feel your touch
And I get this glow
I know there's a man within
I can see him flow

When you look at me
I feel as if we should be
Be more than friends
But I feel as if there is a barrier
A barrier between us

Will I ever know if we should be
Or will I be kept in the dark
In the dark for so long that I don't want
To be with you now or ever

I guess I will never know.

heartless · May 21, 2008, 08:25 PM

well i liked it,the poem has a good flow in it,and theres one thing that i dont like about this,it's color,LOL,you should have made it red,o well,great job,

Quote:

I look into your eye's
I see your beautiful soul
I look at your warming smile
I feel a flutter with in my heart

I feel your touch
And I get this glow
I know there's a man within
I can see him flow

liked it..^_^

EmoNightmareRose · May 21, 2008, 10:40 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Kiani Haki22

I look into your eye's
I see your beautiful soul
I look at your warming smile
I feel a flutter with in my heart

I feel your touch
And I get this glow
I know there's a man within
I can see him flow

When you look at me
I feel as if we should be
Be more than friends
But I feel as if there is a barrier
A barrier between us

Will I ever know if we should be
Or will I be kept in the dark
In the dark for so long that I don't want
To be with you now or ever

I guess I will never know.

whoa, ur so talented. man, im jealous. it was really awesome. i like your poems, 'cause their short and sweet.

Kiani Haki22 · May 22, 2008, 02:59 PM

Quote:

well i liked it,the poem has a good flow in it,and theres one thing that i dont like about this,it's color,LOL,you should have made it red,o well,great job,

I look into your eye's
I see your beautiful soul
I look at your warming smile
I feel a flutter with in my heart

I feel your touch
And I get this glow
I know there's a man within
I can see him flow

liked it..^_^

Thank you so much....I have never had anyone ever be postive about my poems mostly insults.

Quote:

whoa, ur so talented. man, im jealous. it was really awesome. i like your poems, 'cause their short and sweet.

Thank you too...I am glad people actually like me poems...I made a new one to day I plan on posting it on here tomorrow...I left it at school oops...lol.

SlayerX666 · May 22, 2008, 03:38 PM

Thats so awesome i suck at poems your really good i wish i was that good

Kiani Haki22 · May 22, 2008, 03:41 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by SlayerX666

Thats so awesome i suck at poems your really good i wish i was that good

Thank you.....It takes practice....it took me awhile you should of read my poems from 6th grade you would of laughed...one of the names was "Silly Willy". LOL!!!!!!!

May 21, 2008, 02:54 PM	#1 (permalink)
Kiani Haki22 Diamond in the Rough Join Date: May 2008 Location: In the middle of nowhere aka wright city Posts: 443 Thanks: 79 Thanked 14 Times in 13 Posts Credits: 13,074	To You I look into your eye's I see your beautiful soul I look at your warming smile I feel a flutter with in my heart I feel your touch And I get this glow I know there's a man within I can see him flow When you look at me I feel as if we should be Be more than friends But I feel as if there is a barrier A barrier between us Will I ever know if we should be Or will I be kept in the dark In the dark for so long that I don't want To be with you now or ever I guess I will never know. __________________ [Myspace] [Forum Profile] [The Journey my RPG] [My Social Group] [Hearts an a Emptied Revovler (HER)] Last edited by Kiani Haki22; May 22, 2008 at 03:42 PM.
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SlayerX666 Newbie Join Date: May 2008 Location: An extremly crappy place that sucks Posts: 11 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 411	Re: To You Thats so awesome i suck at poems your really good i wish i was that good
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