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    To You

    I look into your eye's
    I see your beautiful soul
    I look at your warming smile
    I feel a flutter with in my heart

    I feel your touch
    And I get this glow
    I know there's a man within
    I can see him flow

    When you look at me
    I feel as if we should be
    Be more than friends
    But I feel as if there is a barrier
    A barrier between us

    Will I ever know if we should be
    Or will I be kept in the dark
    In the dark for so long that I don't want
    To be with you now or ever

    I guess I will never know.
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    well i liked it,the poem has a good flow in it,and theres one thing that i dont like about this,it's color,LOL,you should have made it red,o well,great job,

    I look into your eye's
    I see your beautiful soul
    I look at your warming smile
    I feel a flutter with in my heart

    I feel your touch
    And I get this glow
    I know there's a man within
    I can see him flow
    liked it..^_^
    sometimes i wish i never existed
    -heartless.DY-025

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    Re: To You

    Quote Originally Posted by Kiani Haki22 View Post
    I look into your eye's
    I see your beautiful soul
    I look at your warming smile
    I feel a flutter with in my heart

    I feel your touch
    And I get this glow
    I know there's a man within
    I can see him flow

    When you look at me
    I feel as if we should be
    Be more than friends
    But I feel as if there is a barrier
    A barrier between us

    Will I ever know if we should be
    Or will I be kept in the dark
    In the dark for so long that I don't want
    To be with you now or ever

    I guess I will never know.
    whoa, ur so talented. man, im jealous. it was really awesome. i like your poems, 'cause their short and sweet.

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    Child Of God Kiani Haki22 is off to a good start Kiani Haki22's Avatar
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    well i liked it,the poem has a good flow in it,and theres one thing that i dont like about this,it's color,LOL,you should have made it red,o well,great job,

    I look into your eye's
    I see your beautiful soul
    I look at your warming smile
    I feel a flutter with in my heart

    I feel your touch
    And I get this glow
    I know there's a man within
    I can see him flow

    liked it..^_^
    Thank you so much....I have never had anyone ever be postive about my poems mostly insults.

    whoa, ur so talented. man, im jealous. it was really awesome. i like your poems, 'cause their short and sweet.
    Thank you too...I am glad people actually like me poems...I made a new one to day I plan on posting it on here tomorrow...I left it at school oops...lol.

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    Thats so awesome i suck at poems your really good i wish i was that good

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    Quote Originally Posted by SlayerX666 View Post
    Thats so awesome i suck at poems your really good i wish i was that good
    Thank you.....It takes practice....it took me awhile you should of read my poems from 6th grade you would of laughed...one of the names was "Silly Willy". LOL!!!!!!!

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