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    You make death my only way out.

    ooooooookay so heres another old poem i wrote o.o [[i used to be the user blou]]:

    As blood drips down from my wrist, a faint smile makes its way across my face.
    Feeling the life being sucked from my soul, I think of only on thing:
    My love for you.
    How you said you loved me, and ripped my heart from my body.
    How you made me smile and laugh. How you said you'd never hurt me.
    [More] blood drips.
    Thick red blankets covering my legs, the floor, my heart.
    With the tragic knowledge of death, I smile. With this tear falling from my face, I smile.
    I smile knowing you'll never hurt me...again.
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    Re: You make death my only way out.

    i like this poem from a dark point
    of view hurting your self to make
    him regret what he did to make
    you go that far . thats what i get from this poem
    i like it
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: You make death my only way out.

    ah-!! thank you!! -^ ^- yea...thats the message....thnx!

    Thankx Pyro, for this awesome sig! ^ ^




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    Re: You make death my only way out.

    a-re.. another love..poemm...
    gomen.. let me be hinest.. i dont understand anything that relates to love and fondness... gomen... >.<
    but i like the words that you use to describe~
    gomen once again.... >.<
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    Re: You make death my only way out.

    Whoa, whoa, whoa!!! ^_^ Sweetness. Strong imagery you got there, B.a.n.g. Simply beautiful written, the words flew smoothly as well, which makes this poem a smooth read. Keep up the great and we all hope to read more. Keke. ^_^

    I am entirely pleased with this poem of yours, except one thing, you are missing the letter "e" in the word "made" under the fifth line. ^_^

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    Re: You make death my only way out.

    @aya chan: hmmmmmm...well...its not really lovey-dovey type poem...its more...you were an asshole to me and now imma kill myself...the person who feels this emotion from the poem is a complete idiot because he/she is killing themself over a person. -.-ll who does that?!


    @kedar:lmfao!! haha...i'll change that....
    Last edited by B.a.n.g.B.a.n.g.; Jun 17, 2006 at 11:53 AM. Reason: Automerged Doublepost

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    Re: You make death my only way out.

    Whoa! this is a "darker" poem from the ones im used to reading.
    Its a kinda poem that just lets out the feelings and emotions that they feel!
    Good Job keep it up! !

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    Re: You make death my only way out.

    the escape of life, hurt, pain...........to take one's life away.....to feel at peace....tht is something we feel tempted to do.......nice poem...keep it up

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