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    You are the One

    You are the One

    You’re the only one I think about
    You’re the only one I really care about
    You’re the only one I dream about
    You’re the only one I couldn’t be without

    You are more beautiful than a field of roses
    More breathtaking than a flock of doves
    More perfect than a sky of angels
    You captured my heart, my love

    I’ve searched the world for someone who dares
    To reckon with the likes of me
    Finally found that special person
    And that tells me that we were meant to be

    With the world around us falling
    There’s no one else but you
    I’d trust my life to you a thousand times
    And hope you’d trust me too

    I need to find a way to your heart
    Because I cant imagine us apart
    Lets go away to a secret paradise
    That’s where I want to spend the rest of our lives

    i think this was my best poem, made for a girl that went to my HS, inspiration for most of my poems. One of my friends commented that this poem was simply awesome because i used reckon in it, i would have to agree lol

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    Re: You are the One

    Awwwwwwwwwwwwww!
    I love it.
    The way you descride how you think of her is just beutifull.
    I love it alot.
    And yes useing rekon was a great idea.lol.

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    Re: You are the One

    Yes, it really is great- you can be sure of it because I read it even though I'm not in the mood for love poems now ^^

    It's truly beautiful, very sweet, full of love but not too banal- I like it a lot.... Nice work!!!

    You should post more ^^ so I'll be watining forward for some more poems, k? I really will be... so.... better watch out... ^^ lol

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: You are the One

    This is so full of love and that made it absolutely adorible.Especially because it so well follows a rhyme scheme. Fabulous. I hope to see a lot of your writing here, keep it up. Your definately good.

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    Re: You are the One

    sadly, ive quit writing poems, my inspiration has, well, walked away from my life. considering this feedback though, i just might have to find something worth writing about xP

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    Re: You are the One

    Your too talented to let some girl be your ONLY insperation. And your definately too talented to let some girl walk away with your talent! Write about her leaving! Write about moving on. Write about bugs. Anything. just don't stop writing, besides it's good therepy.

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    Re: You are the One

    i dont think i could force myself to write about bugs.

    who wants to write about something you kill everyday lawl

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    Re: You are the One

    Well it was just a suggestion. Write about killing bugs! Theres tons of things out there to write about you just gotta find somethin' that tickles you.

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