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To Your Arms I rest
Let me die in your arms,
Allow my body feel the warmth
The warmth that I never felt
The warmth, I always longed for.
Tears falling from your eyes
Feels like water that cleanses my soul,
Tears of a kind-hearted being
Is what I need to be free.
Thy breath is like music in my heart,
Your heartbeat gives me the desire
Leave a smile at the cruel world
The world that turned its back on me.
< ^^ feel free to post comments and critiques, thanks for reading.
^_^ Nice~
I like it~
._. Short!
>.> Kinda repeats its self. I get the warmth part fine. ok ~ ^-^
Thanks Mr. K for posting your comment. i appreciate
<<<feels like dying???
Very impresive, I see the whole story in just a fue powerful lines. most injoyed.
FINALLY!
YOu so rock a person taht makes a poem that i enjoy and find nothing wrong with!
To Your Arms I rest
Let me die in your arms,
Allow my body feel the warmth
The warmth that I never felt
The warmth, I always longed for.
THis is the opening its great it gets to the point and tells me what im reading about! I really like the feeling of love and life and tragedy that is displayed so brilliantly in the first 4 lines!
Tears falling from your eyes
Feels like water that cleanses my soul,
Tears of a kind-hearted being
Is what I need to be free.
Love captivates me and sends me into a dreamlike state, tears of joy and not of hate makes me free, a pure kind heart. :)!
Thy breath is like music in my heart,
Your heartbeat gives me the desire
Leave a smile at the cruel world
The world that turned its back on me.
i notice not music to ur ears but to ur heart, very touching! there being there "heartbeat" gives you desire the world that trurned its back on you must have denyed ur love. so kind of a tragic end but leaves me pondering if the 2 of you got back together or did fate tear you apart?
@ nightboyz: thanks for your comment ^^ i do appreciate.
@jaderabbit: wow thanks for a heart-touching comment. ^^
about that question... fate did tear me apart...Quote:
so kind of a tragic end but leaves me pondering if the 2 of you got back together or did fate tear you apart?
Wow! Awesome poem Raja!!! I just love your work!! :) There was so much emotion in this,it was breath takeing.Awesome job Raja!! :)
Thanks Shini for your comment about my poem ^^ thanks again ^^