Your Beautiful Portrait

glacier · Mar 10, 2007, 07:44 PM

I saw you there, covered by lights
I had that feeling but what I supposed to do?
I wanted to say that to you but what would you do after that?
I could only see your back
Knowing that is the most beautiful portrait of you..

Why I always see you in my mind?
Knowing all my effort couldn’t erase you from my memory
All I can see is your beautiful portrait covered by lights

I never wanted you to leave me with such a scary way
You stood near window and I stood near the door
You were seeing the lake over the window, not knowing that I came
Your face that time so peaceful
Did you already feel that?

Why I couldn’t say that?
The words I supposed to say that time but I didn’t
That's my greatest regret
That's my biggest sin
I am ready to be burned in hell if that could bring you back

Now I stand in front of you, but I know even if I screaming you won’t say anything
Last question I have to ask to you
How should I love you?
As a friend?
As a family?
As a lover?
Or more?
I don’t know...

Should I cry for you?
Should I ignore you?
Should I remember you?
Should I hate you?
Or hate myself?

This is my punishment because I didn’t say that words
But somehow deep down in my heart
You will leave us..
Whether I told you or not..
You won’t change your decision..

I saw you there, covered by lights
I had that feeling but what I supposed to do?
I wanted to say that to you but what would you do after that?
I could only see your back
knowing that is the most beautiful portrait of you..

*P.R. Princess* · Mar 10, 2007, 07:48 PM

that was a good poem over all but you need to fix the wording in some parts. There were speeling mistakes and it made it difficult to read, but other than that it was a good poem. I like it.

glacier · Mar 10, 2007, 07:52 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by P.R. Princes

that was a good poem over all but you need to fix the wording in some parts. There were speeling mistakes and it made it difficult to read, but other than that it was a good poem. I like it.

Aye, sir...

I'm not gud writing in english...

i know that...

but thanks anyway

..at least it's improve my english and i know my poem have mistakes....

*P.R. Princess* · Mar 10, 2007, 07:56 PM

Your Welcom I am here to help. and yes your english is good you have little mistakes not really big. yOU KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK.(^.^)

!Rave_Grip · Mar 10, 2007, 08:18 PM

Awesome masterpiece you have there (^_^)=v I love it! It's really entertaining even though it's long!

Mar 10, 2007, 07:44 PM	#1 (permalink)
glacier Newbie Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: MayaAlpha Posts: 76 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Your Beautiful Portrait I saw you there, covered by lights I had that feeling but what I supposed to do? I wanted to say that to you but what would you do after that? I could only see your back Knowing that is the most beautiful portrait of you.. Why I always see you in my mind? Knowing all my effort couldn’t erase you from my memory All I can see is your beautiful portrait covered by lights I never wanted you to leave me with such a scary way You stood near window and I stood near the door You were seeing the lake over the window, not knowing that I came Your face that time so peaceful Did you already feel that? Why I couldn’t say that? The words I supposed to say that time but I didn’t That's my greatest regret That's my biggest sin I am ready to be burned in hell if that could bring you back Now I stand in front of you, but I know even if I screaming you won’t say anything Last question I have to ask to you How should I love you? As a friend? As a family? As a lover? Or more? I don’t know... Should I cry for you? Should I ignore you? Should I remember you? Should I hate you? Or hate myself? This is my punishment because I didn’t say that words But somehow deep down in my heart You will leave us.. Whether I told you or not.. You won’t change your decision.. I saw you there, covered by lights I had that feeling but what I supposed to do? I wanted to say that to you but what would you do after that? I could only see your back knowing that is the most beautiful portrait of you.. __________________ For I am rightful of their band, My best allegiances are to the death ~Gwendolyn Brooks Signature designed by Shonen Thank You
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Mar 10, 2007, 07:48 PM	#2 (permalink)
P.R. Princess NalaMidnight Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: Virginia Posts: 935 Thanks: 6 Thanked 20 Times in 19 Posts	Re: Your Beautiful Portrait that was a good poem over all but you need to fix the wording in some parts. There were speeling mistakes and it made it difficult to read, but other than that it was a good poem. I like it. __________________ ~Falling in love one step at a time~ ~ MYSPACE~AWESOME PLACE TO SAVE~
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Mar 10, 2007, 07:56 PM	#4 (permalink)
P.R. Princess NalaMidnight Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: Virginia Posts: 935 Thanks: 6 Thanked 20 Times in 19 Posts	Re: Your Beautiful Portrait Your Welcom I am here to help. and yes your english is good you have little mistakes not really big. yOU KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK.(^.^) __________________ ~Falling in love one step at a time~ ~ MYSPACE~AWESOME PLACE TO SAVE~
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!Rave_Grip Banned Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Life is an illusion. Posts: 2,431 Thanks: 2 Thanked 17 Times in 16 Posts	Re: Your Beautiful Portrait Awesome masterpiece you have there (^_^)=v I love it! It's really entertaining even though it's long!
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