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    Your Beautiful Portrait

    I saw you there, covered by lights
    I had that feeling but what I supposed to do?
    I wanted to say that to you but what would you do after that?
    I could only see your back
    Knowing that is the most beautiful portrait of you..

    Why I always see you in my mind?
    Knowing all my effort couldn’t erase you from my memory
    All I can see is your beautiful portrait covered by lights

    I never wanted you to leave me with such a scary way
    You stood near window and I stood near the door
    You were seeing the lake over the window, not knowing that I came
    Your face that time so peaceful
    Did you already feel that?

    Why I couldn’t say that?
    The words I supposed to say that time but I didn’t
    That's my greatest regret
    That's my biggest sin
    I am ready to be burned in hell if that could bring you back

    Now I stand in front of you, but I know even if I screaming you won’t say anything
    Last question I have to ask to you
    How should I love you?
    As a friend?
    As a family?
    As a lover?
    Or more?
    I don’t know...

    Should I cry for you?
    Should I ignore you?
    Should I remember you?
    Should I hate you?
    Or hate myself?

    This is my punishment because I didn’t say that words
    But somehow deep down in my heart
    You will leave us..
    Whether I told you or not..
    You won’t change your decision..

    I saw you there, covered by lights
    I had that feeling but what I supposed to do?
    I wanted to say that to you but what would you do after that?
    I could only see your back
    knowing that is the most beautiful portrait of you..
    For I am rightful of their band, My best allegiances are to the death ~Gwendolyn Brooks

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    Re: Your Beautiful Portrait

    that was a good poem over all but you need to fix the wording in some parts. There were speeling mistakes and it made it difficult to read, but other than that it was a good poem. I like it.

    ~Falling in love one step at a time~
    ~ MYSPACE~AWESOME PLACE TO SAVE~

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    Re: Your Beautiful Portrait

    Quote Originally Posted by P.R. Princes View Post
    that was a good poem over all but you need to fix the wording in some parts. There were speeling mistakes and it made it difficult to read, but other than that it was a good poem. I like it.
    Aye, sir...
    I'm not gud writing in english...
    i know that...

    but thanks anyway ..at least it's improve my english and i know my poem have mistakes....
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    Re: Your Beautiful Portrait

    Your Welcom I am here to help. and yes your english is good you have little mistakes not really big. yOU KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK.(^.^)

    ~Falling in love one step at a time~
    ~ MYSPACE~AWESOME PLACE TO SAVE~

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    Re: Your Beautiful Portrait

    Awesome masterpiece you have there (^_^)=v I love it! It's really entertaining even though it's long!

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