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    Your a Beautifule lie

    Your a Beautiful lie,
    all the pain you caused making me want to die.

    Hell,I wish you'd Just drop dead,
    all those ****ing Lies you said.

    I hate you and I hate you guts,
    your the only reason my wrists have cuts.

    So the day you hear I'm dead,
    don't you DARE cry,Instead.

    Remeber that you were the cause,
    you were one of my main flaws.
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    Re: Your a Beautifule lie

    A strong poem with a few lines. This one interests me. The rhyme scheme does not hinder the flow of the poem. keep up the good work.

    Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^

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    Re: Your a Beautifule lie

    i love this poem stright to the point and
    no punches held back life at all blamming
    is always the one thing people do ,its a constant
    and the way you used it here isa very good example.

    i cant wait to read another
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Your a Beautifule lie

    That was a very harsh poem. It was like you wrote a suicide note to someone who really done you wrong. I liked it none the less and I hope your next one is a little less dark than this one was.
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