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    Your last night alive.

    Hello talented poets and posters of AO, here is a little creation of mine I hope you enjoy, or atleast don't hate .

    This is your last night alive.
    The foolishness of your life,
    How you lie, covet and steal,
    Strive for the pain of others,
    Is what led you to this moment.

    It’s to late to repent,
    To redeem,
    To live.
    To bask in the new day’s sun,
    And the old day’s moon.

    There is no present.
    There is no past,
    No future,
    Were the winds of fate now blow you.
    Blowing to the dead man’s tune.

    Tonight you feel only cold steel,
    Warmed by the blackened liquid,
    That fuels your wicked soul.
    From this wound,
    Your blood, your life shall flow.
    This is your last night alive.
    Last edited by Exoparadapsyphobia; Jun 02, 2006 at 10:07 PM.
    Death is your most loyal companion, for he will never fail you.

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    Re: Your last night alive.

    hmm...nt my kind of poem but i think it's ok....i dun go with the "fighting" thing tat u guyz do....very nc description though....7/10

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    Re: Your last night alive.

    lolz umm dark? XD well its good XD

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    Re: Your last night alive.

    Hmmm..... You're really a person that lives in the dark.....
    Nice poem.....

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    Re: Your last night alive.

    wow that was really dark I like it keep it up

    I live in the shadows and I am as fast as the speed of light, but I use my ability's to help people even though they fear me for who I am.

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    Re: Your last night alive.

    It's about killing someone who deserves to die. I thought it might sound a bit positive to people, guess not XD. Thank you for the feedback thus far though.
    Last edited by Exoparadapsyphobia; Jun 03, 2006 at 11:37 AM.
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