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Jun 02, 2006, 10:04 PM
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 Sophist of Satire  Join Date: May 2006 Location: Always where I'm not supposed to be.
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 Credits: 5,484 | Your last night alive. Hello talented poets and posters of AO, here is a little creation of mine I hope you enjoy, or atleast don't hate  .This is your last night alive. The foolishness of your life, How you lie, covet and steal, Strive for the pain of others, Is what led you to this moment. It’s to late to repent, To redeem, To live. To bask in the new day’s sun, And the old day’s moon. There is no present. There is no past, No future, Were the winds of fate now blow you. Blowing to the dead man’s tune. Tonight you feel only cold steel, Warmed by the blackened liquid, That fuels your wicked soul. From this wound, Your blood, your life shall flow. This is your last night alive.
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Jun 02, 2006, 10:20 PM
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| Elie Jelly  Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: Hell is an understatement
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Credits: 2,051 | Re: Your last night alive. hmm...nt my kind of poem but i think it's ok....i dun go with the "fighting" thing tat u guyz do....very nc description though....7/10 
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Jun 03, 2006, 12:05 AM
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| Mercenary  Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: War zones around the globe...
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Credits: 901 | Re: Your last night alive. Hmmm..... You're really a person that lives in the dark..... Nice poem.....
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Jun 03, 2006, 01:24 AM
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 Diamond in the Rough  Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: I live in a Place where I'am Truly Happy and that would be with All My Friends
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Credits: 348 | Re: Your last night alive. wow that was really dark I like it keep it up
__________________  I live in the shadows and I am as fast as the speed of light, but I use my ability's to help people even though they fear me for who I am. A Brand new Theme song for all my friends who use to come to Ao and the People that still come's to Ao. http://video.freevideoblog.com/hotte...7631ca1c2a.htm |
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Jun 03, 2006, 11:24 AM
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| Sophist of Satire Join Date: May 2006 Location: Always where I'm not supposed to be.
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Credits: 5,484 | Re: Your last night alive. It's about killing someone who deserves to die. I thought it might sound a bit positive to people, guess not XD. Thank you for the feedback thus far though.
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