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| Demon Loving Only Himself Join Date: May 2006 Location: I dislike stalkers.
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![]() ![]() Credits: 1,006 | Your Love You melted my icy heart Struck a match in the darkness Nothing I've done was as smart As opening my soul to your kindness. My heart beats for your love Finally found a feeling I can trust Your smile as sweet as a dove Melts through a soul of decay and rust Happiness reflected in my eyes Tears of sadness stop their flow The sorrow inside recedes and dies All I want is for our love to grow Lost in your loving gaze I see our future in your eyes Seeing through the haze This feeling takes my heart to the skies I barely recall life before Our memories have made it fade away I don't want to be alone anymore You are my light of day I love holding you to me Our love in my blood like a river as it flows This is how it will always be Beautiful as winter with pure white snow A long life with you It's what I long for Nothing else will do All I want is you, nothing more Your love flows through me like blood You and I will always be Sharing love deeper than any flood You are the one for me I wrote this poem for my girlfriend. I plan to give it to her with her presents on Valentine's Day. Do you think she'll like it? Any ideas on how to make it better? Opinions are appreciated.
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![]() ![]() Credits: 2,696 | Re: Your Love That was such a sweet poem. That's how I feel about my boyfriend. He means everything to me and I never wanna lose him. Don't worry I'm sure your girlfriend will love it.
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![]() ![]() Credits: 7,994 | Re: Your Love well it was good, and i think to make it a little better, talk about her appearance and how she lights up ur day. and also, try next time to rhyme larger words to make the description better, like for example instead of using beauty, use exquisiteness because it sounds more indepth and stuff. but nice poem ![]()
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