Self Loving Carnage

You melted my icy heart
Struck a match in the darkness
Nothing I've done was as smart
As opening my soul to your kindness.

My heart beats for your love
Finally found a feeling I can trust
Your smile as sweet as a dove
Melts through a soul of decay and rust

Happiness reflected in my eyes
Tears of sadness stop their flow
The sorrow inside recedes and dies
All I want is for our love to grow

Lost in your loving gaze
I see our future in your eyes
Seeing through the haze
This feeling takes my heart to the skies

I barely recall life before
Our memories have made it fade away
I don't want to be alone anymore
You are my light of day

I love holding you to me
Our love in my blood like a river as it flows
This is how it will always be
Beautiful as winter with pure white snow

A long life with you
It's what I long for
Nothing else will do
All I want is you, nothing more

Your love flows through me like blood
You and I will always be
Sharing love deeper than any flood
You are the one for me




I wrote this poem for my girlfriend. I plan to give it to her with her presents on Valentine's Day. Do you think she'll like it? Any ideas on how to make it better? Opinions are appreciated.

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CherryBlossom18

That was such a sweet poem. That's how I feel about my boyfriend. He means everything to me and I never wanna lose him. Don't worry I'm sure your girlfriend will love it.

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Raimann

well it was good, and i think to make it a little better, talk about her appearance and how she lights up ur day. and also, try next time to rhyme larger words to make the description better, like for example instead of using beauty, use exquisiteness because it sounds more indepth and stuff. but nice poem she will like it.

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