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    Unhappy Your Mistake

    I'm dirty.

    Ruined. Scuffed. Tainted.
    Fading away, needing to be repainted.

    I'm marked.

    My souls been defaced.
    Worn down, used up, never replaced.

    I'm stained.

    You put graffiti on my heart.
    Then you ran away, couldn't finish what you start.

    I'm scratched.

    And, its a wound I cannot hide.
    Haunted by the caption "always by your side".

    I'm smeared.

    But, I haven't been erased.
    What I wouldn't give to dissapear without a trace.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Your Mistake

    Nice poem, peach. I like it a lot. I love the variety of emotions and how you feel. The analogies are great. Nice, nice work peach. I enjoyed it very much.

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    Re: Your Mistake

    Meee love it. I like the way you worded everything. It has soo much emotion in a little poem. I like it. Keep it up and I hope to see more of your work.

    ~Falling in love one step at a time~
    ~ MYSPACE~AWESOME PLACE TO SAVE~

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    Re: Your Mistake

    It has a lot of emotion into it, the wordings are interesting
    "Graffitti on my heart" instead of wounds on my heart or something like that.
    Keep it up ^_^

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