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    your smile

    The tears run down my face.
    In my heart lies a empty space.
    Where your love once was.
    Ive heard the pain go's away.
    But I dont believe it.
    Because all thats left is pain!
    The beat of my heart fades.
    As my eyes close the last thing I see.
    Is a smile on your face!
    by leftinthedark aka nicole!

    sasuke is mine.

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    Re: your smile

    Quote Originally Posted by leftinthedark View Post
    The tears run down my face.
    In my heart lies a empty space.
    Where your love once was.
    Ive heard the pain go's away.
    But I dont believe it.
    Because all thats left is pain!
    The beat of my heart fades.
    As my eyes close the last thing I see.
    Is a smile on your face!
    by leftinthedark aka nicole!
    Is this poem trying to convey the feeling of someone someone who used to love you, smiling at your death??

    If it is... then you have touched on a very real topic to me. I believe there is someone who I thought onced loved me, who would now love to see me die.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: your smile

    wow that was good,
    Alot better than the other.
    I love it lots. ^.^
    Keep it up.! Hope to see more!

    ~Falling in love one step at a time~
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    Re: your smile

    Awesome job!!!!!!
    Full of pain and raw emotion!!!\
    I can almost taste the sadness...........
    DO NOT MAKE ME UNLEASH MY INNER DEMON

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    Re: your smile

    OMG nicole, that was really good, your one of the best writers ever and i'm not just saying that you great, i lvove you my sister..
    haha my new obsession

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    Re: your smile

    Hey...u did not tell me u had a lil sis..

    Hmm...i like the imaginary in this.. and the ending was...like.. whammy~! its slow but gives a long lasting impact~! so.. wwhammy~!!

    Keep up the good work

    Legion Ketsueki Lives on~!!
    I'm BACK AO!
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