You've made your bed, now lie in it.

**bratling** · Nov 02, 2007 10:01 AM

Something twisting, pulling, churning.
Disrupting my usually peacfull sleep,
With wild tossing and turning.
Happiness obviously doesn't come cheap.

Filled with memorys as I go to bed,
Dreams of you, and when it was "us"
Churning up inside my head.
And how it got tossed away thus.

Now I'm haunted, not by a ghost,
But by a bitter-sweet memory
And what really hurts the most,
Is the thoughts won't let me be.

Telling me the mistakes I've made.
Over and over again, like I can't see,
The ugly inside all locked in my head.
The twisted dark thoughts that tourture me.

When all things are done and said,
You find yourself in this deep dark pit,
You've made your bed.
Now lie in it.

**RayMe** · Nov 02, 2007 10:05 AM

wow.. @.@ powerful and nice description... a very good poem indeed,..nice..

**bratling** · Nov 02, 2007 10:07 AM

I'm so glad that you like it. And that you think it's so powerful and such. Thanks so much.

**highteckdudu** · Nov 02, 2007 10:28 AM

so much in this one, i'm not sure what to say. very interesting! wow keep up the good work! cant wait to see more!

**atomik_sprout** · Nov 02, 2007 12:39 PM

This is quite powerful. I like this one, although I must say that I cannot say too much else due to the fact that I don't wanna put us "on blast" like that. Good job though.

**Lasura** · Nov 02, 2007 01:26 PM

Hmmmm.... This is really good- the structure is just perfect in my view and it's really, really nice to read it. You've done a wonderfool work with rhyming and rhythm and nice descriptions... just make you... kinda feel what's described.

A really nice work and I hope to see more as always ^^

**bratling** · Nov 02, 2007 01:28 PM

Thanks to you two, my two favorite commenters. Actually your all my faorite commenters cus you always encourage me so much.

I'm glad you like it so much Highteck. And thanks Sprout, I really appriciate your comments on my work. You -could- always PM me about it.

**Tifa Lockhart** · Nov 02, 2007 02:20 PM

Not a bad poem. Interesting and fun to read. Keep up the good work. [:

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