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    Anguish

    A heart shrouded in flames
    The memories of an eternal love
    Feeling of joy and bliss scorched
    Never to be quenched by the tears of heaven

    A rose that once bloomed red turned black
    Once it's laid upon the casket of my emotions
    Dreams of rising like the phoenix shattered
    The ashes that once revived turned cold

    Angels once held my heart near
    Now serpents of you poison my heart
    As the venom seeps through my veins
    A once beating heart stops frozen and black

    Thoughts of love flee my mind
    The hatred sets in and forms a devil
    One who will take you heart straight to hell
    Allowing you to feel the torment and anguish

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    Re: Anguish


    this poem is filled with deep feelings of wrath / anger / revenge.
    The feeling of a lost love... it hurts...

    I was amazed on the way you put those feelings into words.
    it shows the reality. The imagery is good too.

    it was dark and so Good!

    Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^

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    Re: Anguish

    Thanks raja_psyche for your wonderful comment! I took the advice that I got from the clan members here and allowed memories of an old love take over and remind me of all the pain I went through!

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    Re: Anguish

    Your poem is really deep and filled with the bitter feelings of a lost love. It really speaks to the reader and makes them feel the same emotions the speaker is feeling. Great poem, I really liked it ^^


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    Re: Anguish

    Thank you for the awesome comment! I tried my best to put a lot of emotion into my poem and everything else kind of just falls into place!

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