Anguish

BlueFox1 · Oct 15, 2006, 09:49 AM

A heart shrouded in flames
The memories of an eternal love
Feeling of joy and bliss scorched
Never to be quenched by the tears of heaven

A rose that once bloomed red turned black
Once it's laid upon the casket of my emotions
Dreams of rising like the phoenix shattered
The ashes that once revived turned cold

Angels once held my heart near
Now serpents of you poison my heart
As the venom seeps through my veins
A once beating heart stops frozen and black

Thoughts of love flee my mind
The hatred sets in and forms a devil
One who will take you heart straight to hell
Allowing you to feel the torment and anguish

raja_psyche · Oct 16, 2006, 05:13 AM

this poem is filled with deep feelings of wrath / anger / revenge.
The feeling of a lost love... it hurts...

I was amazed on the way you put those feelings into words.
it shows the reality. The imagery is good too.

it was dark and so Good!

BlueFox1 · Oct 16, 2006, 08:21 AM

Thanks raja_psyche for your wonderful comment! I took the advice that I got from the clan members here and allowed memories of an old love take over and remind me of all the pain I went through!

Hana_Chann · Oct 16, 2006, 01:01 PM

Your poem is really deep and filled with the bitter feelings of a lost love. It really speaks to the reader and makes them feel the same emotions the speaker is feeling. Great poem, I really liked it ^^

BlueFox1 · Oct 17, 2006, 10:43 AM

Thank you for the awesome comment! I tried my best to put a lot of emotion into my poem and everything else kind of just falls into place!

Oct 15, 2006, 09:49 AM	#1 (permalink)
BlueFox1 Upcoming Legend Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: A place called Midnight Sun know as Tranquility Posts: 584 Thanks: 8 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts Credits: 1,136	Anguish A heart shrouded in flames The memories of an eternal love Feeling of joy and bliss scorched Never to be quenched by the tears of heaven A rose that once bloomed red turned black Once it's laid upon the casket of my emotions Dreams of rising like the phoenix shattered The ashes that once revived turned cold Angels once held my heart near Now serpents of you poison my heart As the venom seeps through my veins A once beating heart stops frozen and black Thoughts of love flee my mind The hatred sets in and forms a devil One who will take you heart straight to hell Allowing you to feel the torment and anguish __________________
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Oct 16, 2006, 05:13 AM	#2 (permalink)
raja_psyche Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: In the Pearl of the Orient Posts: 393 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,477	Re: Anguish this poem is filled with deep feelings of wrath / anger / revenge. The feeling of a lost love... it hurts... I was amazed on the way you put those feelings into words. it shows the reality. The imagery is good too. it was dark and so Good! __________________ Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^
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Oct 16, 2006, 08:21 AM	#3 (permalink)
BlueFox1 Upcoming Legend Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: A place called Midnight Sun know as Tranquility Posts: 584 Thanks: 8 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts Credits: 1,136	Re: Anguish Thanks raja_psyche for your wonderful comment! I took the advice that I got from the clan members here and allowed memories of an old love take over and remind me of all the pain I went through! __________________
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Hana_Chann Newbie Join Date: Sep 2006 Posts: 48 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 110	Re: Anguish Your poem is really deep and filled with the bitter feelings of a lost love. It really speaks to the reader and makes them feel the same emotions the speaker is feeling. Great poem, I really liked it ^^ __________________
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Oct 17, 2006, 10:43 AM	#5 (permalink)
BlueFox1 Upcoming Legend Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: A place called Midnight Sun know as Tranquility Posts: 584 Thanks: 8 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts Credits: 1,136	Re: Anguish Thank you for the awesome comment! I tried my best to put a lot of emotion into my poem and everything else kind of just falls into place! __________________
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