Can you imagine?

*Abu Dhabi* · Sep 26, 2006, 11:58 PM

Imagine...
making a grand supper, yet no one comes to eat.

Imagine...
waiting all night for someone who does not come.

Imagine...
writting a letter and recieving no reply.

what do you feel?

what crazy ideas swirl through your head?
what pain rips through your heart?
what coldness crawls through your body?
what lonliness does your soul endure?

Imagine...
making a grand supper, and only one comes to eat.

Imagine...
waiting all night for someone who finally comes in the morning.

Imagine...
writting a letter and recieving a phone call instead.

what do you feel?

Thankful.

i hope that wasn't a waste of time for you! This was inspired by the lonliness i feel when i see the No buddies online box...

*Soshi Kitai* · Oct 09, 2006, 02:30 PM

^_^ Aww darling, I'm always here for you.

... >_> But I understand.

It's a beautiful poem, by the way. ^_^ Don't take this offensively: I know you can do better.

*Baal* · Oct 09, 2006, 07:56 PM

is kind'sa wierd how u make em but is full of pasion i can say that.

BlueFox1 · Oct 10, 2006, 02:23 AM

The passion is there and that's great, just be careful when you use the word imagine and what repeatedly! Now I'm not trying to offend you but I wrote a poem called "Thank You" and I used these word a lot! In short what I'm trying to say overall good job, just done write imagine and what so many times to where the reader gets tired of reading! Hope I didn't offend you.

*Kasai* · Oct 10, 2006, 02:27 AM

I'm not a big fan of the repetition.

Pride_Edward · Oct 17, 2006, 04:24 AM

The repitition of words are great! I'm imagining something already the minute i was readinmg this poem....but the poem was kinda dull because of its topic but anyways,it was pretty. ^_^

Hana_Chann · Oct 18, 2006, 11:32 AM

Great poem, I liked the repetition and I could the reader can identitfy with the feelings described.

*Abu Dhabi* · Oct 25, 2006, 01:32 PM

>o< thanks everyone! >.> i know it's not the best but this was more an excersize in my emotion then trying to make something grand...

<.< it felt so dull beecuz i felted dulled when i was writing it... dulled feelings, and dulled senses...

^_^ but i'm glad some of you still liked it! thanks a bunch!

Sep 26, 2006, 11:58 PM	#1 (permalink)
Abu Dhabi Spoken for. Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Neither here... nor there. Posts: 1,510 Thanks: 12 Thanked 15 Times in 13 Posts Credits: 6,851	Can you imagine? Imagine... making a grand supper, yet no one comes to eat. Imagine... waiting all night for someone who does not come. Imagine... writting a letter and recieving no reply. what do you feel? what crazy ideas swirl through your head? what pain rips through your heart? what coldness crawls through your body? what lonliness does your soul endure? Imagine... making a grand supper, and only one comes to eat. Imagine... waiting all night for someone who finally comes in the morning. Imagine... writting a letter and recieving a phone call instead. what do you feel? Thankful. i hope that wasn't a waste of time for you! This was inspired by the lonliness i feel when i see the No buddies online box... __________________ great day! . . .
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Soshi Kitai For You... Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: The farther you go, the less you know. Posts: 1,245 Thanks: 0 Thanked 6 Times in 5 Posts Credits: 9,052	^_^ Aww darling, I'm always here for you. ... >_> But I understand. It's a beautiful poem, by the way. ^_^ Don't take this offensively: I know you can do better. __________________ Click here to Brawl! We had an awesome anniversary! Click here to join in on the fun!
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Baal S.E.L - sexy etna lover Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Mayaguez Posts: 1,066 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 309	is kind'sa wierd how u make em but is full of pasion i can say that. __________________ perdoname michelle!
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BlueFox1 Upcoming Legend Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: A place called Midnight Sun know as Tranquility Posts: 584 Thanks: 8 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts Credits: 1,176	The passion is there and that's great, just be careful when you use the word imagine and what repeatedly! Now I'm not trying to offend you but I wrote a poem called "Thank You" and I used these word a lot! In short what I'm trying to say overall good job, just done write imagine and what so many times to where the reader gets tired of reading! Hope I didn't offend you. __________________
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Pride_Edward Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 247 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 110	Re: Can you imagine? The repitition of words are great! I'm imagining something already the minute i was readinmg this poem....but the poem was kinda dull because of its topic but anyways,it was pretty. ^_^ __________________ Our own site: http://www.fma-adikz.tk
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Abu Dhabi Spoken for. Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Neither here... nor there. Posts: 1,510 Thanks: 12 Thanked 15 Times in 13 Posts Credits: 6,851	Re: Can you imagine? >o< thanks everyone! >.> i know it's not the best but this was more an excersize in my emotion then trying to make something grand... <.< it felt so dull beecuz i felted dulled when i was writing it... dulled feelings, and dulled senses... ^_^ but i'm glad some of you still liked it! thanks a bunch! __________________ great day! . . .
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