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    Embarrasment

    You walk into class and get in your seat,
    But before you get there, you trip over your feet.

    You're trying to sit down without being the class clown,
    Then you fall to the ground saying, 'Who pushed me down?'

    You try to erase the first moments of class,
    So you get up to ask the teacher for a pass.

    Going through class then to the computer room,
    When the late bell rings you've got to use the bathroom.

    You get to P.E and then to Math class,
    Trying to go the bathroom but they won't give you a pass.

    You sit in your seat but can't stand the heat,
    As you get up you use the bathroom in your seat.

    For the rest of the day you are gloomy and gray,
    'Cause you cannot believe what had happened that day.

    You go home to tell your parents why you're mad,
    Then they laugh and say it isn't all that bad.

    You go to your room and cry the night away,
    Then you wake and laugh at what happened that day.

    <O: Hey and hello, this is my 1st post on the Poems clan. Ive been a member for a while apparently but i didn't know if i really was or not, see'ing as u can only be in one clan at a time apparently, but i checked in my profle and it says im in both, so i will be dedicated and be in both ^_^. Hope you like this silly poem!>

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    ^_^ That was a really good poem, Othello!

    it was short, sweet and had a zing at the end!

    ^_^ i don't think much can be done to improve it cuz it's already so great! i would only suggest that you keep a similar amount of beats/syllables in your stanzas... but it's completely great otherwise!

    keep up the good work!

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    ^_^ I'd have to say you're one of the most talented writers here!
    Heck, that's the kind of thing you could win contests with, or sell to books!

    ._. (but if you're like me, you'd really rather not make something of your's mainstream... or actually: don't really care to. XD)

    But seriously, this is a really awesome poem!

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    Re: Embarrasment

    Nice poem Othello. It was a happy poem about embarrasment. Its right to laugh at it because embarrasments are evrywhere and we can't avoid it...

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    Re: Embarrasment

    Lol, great Poem Othello. I think we can all identify with the feeling of embarrasment and thinking its so bad but realize it wasn't bad at all ^^;


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    Re: Embarrasment

    I have to agree with Pride_Edward because no matter how hard you try you can never really avoid being embarassed! Nice job on this one Othello!

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