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    light vs darkness

    light is happy
    everthing is at peace
    like an everlasting truce
    with each other

    darkness is oppsite
    no peace at all
    truces of peace are nowere
    the fight between light and darkness will never stop

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    Re: light vs darkness

    ''To short''
    'but good''
    ''keep''
    ''it''
    ''up''



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    Re: light vs darkness

    Think it's not too short. There's just a lack of imagery and substance.
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    Re: light vs darkness

    It was too direct that you were comparing light to dark. Take the line out how they are opposite and say something more like indirect to what you are implying. Try to beat around the bush. It just is too forward for me.

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    Re: light vs darkness

    Words very simply put, one part explaining light, the other darkness. I think there isn't imagery or anything, it's only blurted with nowhere to truly comment upon. I say it could turn into something very interesting, but you'd need to make it into a more traditional way....in other words: write things that describe what you think and not only what you think so the idea portrayed will be easy for all to see in their own special way...though your free to write however you want...critic is supposed to come from everything and anything :P
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