![]() |
| Welcome to AnimeOnline.net, your personal Anime Community! | Anime Online Rulez! |
| |||||||
| | LinkBack | Thread Tools | Display Modes |
| | #4 (permalink) |
Upcoming Legend Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: I get bored easily
Posts: 511
Thanks: 0
Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts
![]() ![]() Credits: 601 | Re: light vs darkness It was too direct that you were comparing light to dark. Take the line out how they are opposite and say something more like indirect to what you are implying. Try to beat around the bush. It just is too forward for me.
__________________ ![]() I'm a glass child. I am Hannah's regrets. Monster. |
| Status: Offline
|
| | #5 (permalink) |
RPG Lord and Master/Poet Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: Sainte-Foy, Qc (Canada)
Posts: 856
Thanks: 1
Thanked 9 Times in 9 Posts
![]() ![]() Credits: 4,612 | Re: light vs darkness Words very simply put, one part explaining light, the other darkness. I think there isn't imagery or anything, it's only blurted with nowhere to truly comment upon. I say it could turn into something very interesting, but you'd need to make it into a more traditional way....in other words: write things that describe what you think and not only what you think so the idea portrayed will be easy for all to see in their own special way...though your free to write however you want...critic is supposed to come from everything and anything :P |
| Status: Offline
|
| Thread Tools | |
| Display Modes | |
| |
Similar Threads | ||||
| Thread | Thread Starter | Forum | Replies | Last Post |
| my light | powerxxx | Poems | 2 | Jun 28, 2006 09:32 AM |
| Light | Sincere | Poems | 9 | Jun 23, 2006 08:15 PM |
| Ray of Light... | SousukeSagara | Poems | 2 | Jun 07, 2006 06:35 AM |
| [Poem] Light, Darkness, and Truth | AnimeAficianado | The Vault | 8 | May 16, 2005 06:18 PM |
| Ray of Light | toast-san | The Vault | 0 | Nov 09, 2004 02:35 PM |