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    Black Glass

    A hundred words have passed his lips
    A thousand voices he can recollect
    A million people he has known
    But never seen.

    Sometimes his life is confusing
    Like solving a puzzle of solid white
    The clouds he walks on
    Are falling down.

    There’s lightning diving down to earth
    The calm has been blown away
    The rain is beginning to fall
    Winds are changing.

    The world is collapsing in the chaos of it’s own
    And the man can finally see,
    See the pandemonium through blindness
    See the universe through black glass.
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    Re: My latest ...

    Darkness, hope, confusion, deception. It's kinda sad for him to finally see and well...see the word at its end.



    Nice storytelling, or Ballad as it's called or something. I wonder if we could tell a whole story through poetry...would take a while, that's for sure. *gets an idea*, I'm off!!!
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    darklish style i love it
    is short but u have better grammar than i...



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    That was very well written. No complaints really. Except the repetitivness used in the beginning of each line. If you took out the "A" and "The". Its sentence will still make sense. And will still flow very well.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Soldat of life View Post
    I wonder if we could tell a whole story through poetry...would take a while, that's for sure. *gets an idea*, I'm off!!!
    I believe that it's called a sonnet. To tell a whole story through a poem. Take Sir Gawain and the Green Knight for example.
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