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HieisLove · Sep 19, 2006, 09:35 AM

The beauty one behold deep in
The smile one gives

The blessing everyone recieve
The truth behind all doubts

The hold of a hand
The air we breathe

A embrace one loves to feel
The life we live

Our heart that beats
The love one shares

Forever promised
Unbroken hearts felt

The tears one cries
Emotional destroyed

The hope of destiny
The destiny of hope

Life or death
Death or life

The questions are asked
The answers are given

Where do one stand now?
What is the meaning to all?

*Baal* · Sep 19, 2006, 07:21 PM

Hmph (concentrate)
is it no tittle cuz ur talking about the inner feelins
cuz its really awesome if u see it that way.

Nympho · Sep 20, 2006, 09:21 PM

The grammar needs desprate attention. And the end could have made more sense. It was a good idea of a poem. But a poem's grammar is just as important as the feeling. Its a huge distraction to try and figure out what the writer was trying to say if its written in the wrong form and/or context.

Sep 19, 2006, 09:35 AM	#1 (permalink)
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Baal S.E.L - sexy etna lover Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Mayaguez Posts: 1,066 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 309	Re: No Title Hmph (concentrate) is it no tittle cuz ur talking about the inner feelins cuz its really awesome if u see it that way. __________________ perdoname michelle!
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Nympho Upcoming Legend Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: I get bored easily Posts: 511 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 601	Re: No Title The grammar needs desprate attention. And the end could have made more sense. It was a good idea of a poem. But a poem's grammar is just as important as the feeling. Its a huge distraction to try and figure out what the writer was trying to say if its written in the wrong form and/or context. __________________ I'm a glass child. I am Hannah's regrets. Monster.
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