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    The Profound Truths

    All things in the world exist but
    only by two words can they exist ‘properly’
    these words are the basis of the universe
    the very foundation by which we live

    One syllable can speak these words
    that is all that’s needed to learn them
    and yet one word, just one
    can summarize the both of them

    The words must be followed strictly
    for if they were not the world would ‘die’
    these elusive words sing an unconscious symphony
    they run across our eyes while we look at the world

    Words that can kill and words that can soothe
    with them, they bring a promise just one though
    a promise of the perfect world
    of the perfect people

    But which word must we follow to achieve perfection
    what path must we walk and which fork do we take
    should the world be forced into this conformity
    should the population change because of an ideal

    Can one not exist on a road away from these words
    without the shadow of morality binding us to choice
    the shackles of good and evil hanging heavily upon the shoulders
    the shoulders of everyone, of humanity

    Alack, who can make the decision
    the one decision that can save man from dubious choice
    a choosing that will stop discrimination
    The one and final word that can bring about Utopia

    Even then all will exist by word but
    this word will bring smiles not selection
    does this word already exist though
    is there truly a being beyond good and evil

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    I don't think many will be able to find this poem a good one, the greatness of it is hiding somewhere in the words not even I can find it... I just know this one says something, it carries a message on a primal level, something we can't actually grasp.. the subconscious sees this I think and not the actual conscious. Of coarse I'm most likely only thinking this because I made it and it says those kinds of things to me.
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    Re: The Profound Truths

    Quote Originally Posted by FLawEdmiNd View Post
    All things in the world exist but
    only by two words can they exist ‘properly’
    these words are the basis of the universe
    the very foundation by which we live

    One syllable can speak these words
    that is all that’s needed to learn them
    and yet one word, just one
    can summarize the both of them

    The words must be followed strictly
    for if they were not the world would ‘die’
    these elusive words sing an unconscious symphony
    they run across our eyes while we look at the world

    Words that can kill and words that can soothe
    with them, they bring a promise just one though
    a promise of the perfect world
    of the perfect people

    But which word must we follow to achieve perfection
    what path must we walk and which fork do we take
    should the world be forced into this conformity
    should the population change because of an ideal

    Can one not exist on a road away from these words
    without the shadow of morality binding us to choice
    the shackles of good and evil hanging heavily upon the shoulders
    the shoulders of everyone, of humanity

    Alack, who can make the decision
    the one decision that can save man from dubious choice
    a choosing that will stop discrimination
    The one and final word that can bring about Utopia

    Even then all will exist by word but
    this word will bring smiles not selection
    does this word already exist though
    is there truly a being beyond good and evil

    ---
    I don't think many will be able to find this poem a good one, the greatness of it is hiding somewhere in the words not even I can find it... I just know this one says something, it carries a message on a primal level, something we can't actually grasp.. the subconscious sees this I think and not the actual conscious. Of coarse I'm most likely only thinking this because I made it and it says those kinds of things to me.

    I think it is a good one. I also think that the first of the two words is the one that we must follow as a civilization to follow the second would bring torment and anguish to all.

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    Re: The Profound Truths

    Flaw, this is different and beautiful. I actually felt something towards this poem. Awesome job.

    My only problem is the lack of punctuation. I think it would give the poem a nice flow if used correctly.
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    Re: The Profound Truths

    FLawEdmiNd this is simply beautiful, you really made me think of what this word is that makes humanity survive! I'm truly impressed by this poem, the flow of the poem is awesome! I agree with Kasai about punctuation, but the idea and motive behind this poem is outstanding! Keep up the good work and I'm looking foward to reading more of your work! Truly magnificent!

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