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Old Jan 01, 2007, 07:28 PM   #1 (permalink)
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The Profound Truths

All things in the world exist but
only by two words can they exist ‘properly’
these words are the basis of the universe
the very foundation by which we live

One syllable can speak these words
that is all that’s needed to learn them
and yet one word, just one
can summarize the both of them

The words must be followed strictly
for if they were not the world would ‘die’
these elusive words sing an unconscious symphony
they run across our eyes while we look at the world

Words that can kill and words that can soothe
with them, they bring a promise just one though
a promise of the perfect world
of the perfect people

But which word must we follow to achieve perfection
what path must we walk and which fork do we take
should the world be forced into this conformity
should the population change because of an ideal

Can one not exist on a road away from these words
without the shadow of morality binding us to choice
the shackles of good and evil hanging heavily upon the shoulders
the shoulders of everyone, of humanity

Alack, who can make the decision
the one decision that can save man from dubious choice
a choosing that will stop discrimination
The one and final word that can bring about Utopia

Even then all will exist by word but
this word will bring smiles not selection
does this word already exist though
is there truly a being beyond good and evil

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I don't think many will be able to find this poem a good one, the greatness of it is hiding somewhere in the words not even I can find it... I just know this one says something, it carries a message on a primal level, something we can't actually grasp.. the subconscious sees this I think and not the actual conscious. Of coarse I'm most likely only thinking this because I made it and it says those kinds of things to me.
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Old Jan 03, 2007, 07:54 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Re: The Profound Truths

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All things in the world exist but
only by two words can they exist ‘properly’
these words are the basis of the universe
the very foundation by which we live

One syllable can speak these words
that is all that’s needed to learn them
and yet one word, just one
can summarize the both of them

The words must be followed strictly
for if they were not the world would ‘die’
these elusive words sing an unconscious symphony
they run across our eyes while we look at the world

Words that can kill and words that can soothe
with them, they bring a promise just one though
a promise of the perfect world
of the perfect people

But which word must we follow to achieve perfection
what path must we walk and which fork do we take
should the world be forced into this conformity
should the population change because of an ideal

Can one not exist on a road away from these words
without the shadow of morality binding us to choice
the shackles of good and evil hanging heavily upon the shoulders
the shoulders of everyone, of humanity

Alack, who can make the decision
the one decision that can save man from dubious choice
a choosing that will stop discrimination
The one and final word that can bring about Utopia

Even then all will exist by word but
this word will bring smiles not selection
does this word already exist though
is there truly a being beyond good and evil

---
I don't think many will be able to find this poem a good one, the greatness of it is hiding somewhere in the words not even I can find it... I just know this one says something, it carries a message on a primal level, something we can't actually grasp.. the subconscious sees this I think and not the actual conscious. Of coarse I'm most likely only thinking this because I made it and it says those kinds of things to me.

I think it is a good one. I also think that the first of the two words is the one that we must follow as a civilization to follow the second would bring torment and anguish to all.
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Old Jan 04, 2007, 07:39 AM   #3 (permalink)
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Re: The Profound Truths

Flaw, this is different and beautiful. I actually felt something towards this poem. Awesome job.

My only problem is the lack of punctuation. I think it would give the poem a nice flow if used correctly.
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Old Jan 08, 2007, 08:25 AM   #4 (permalink)
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FLawEdmiNd this is simply beautiful, you really made me think of what this word is that makes humanity survive! I'm truly impressed by this poem, the flow of the poem is awesome! I agree with Kasai about punctuation, but the idea and motive behind this poem is outstanding! Keep up the good work and I'm looking foward to reading more of your work! Truly magnificent!
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