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![]() ![]() Credits: 7,843 | The Profound Truths All things in the world exist but only by two words can they exist ‘properly’ these words are the basis of the universe the very foundation by which we live One syllable can speak these words that is all that’s needed to learn them and yet one word, just one can summarize the both of them The words must be followed strictly for if they were not the world would ‘die’ these elusive words sing an unconscious symphony they run across our eyes while we look at the world Words that can kill and words that can soothe with them, they bring a promise just one though a promise of the perfect world of the perfect people But which word must we follow to achieve perfection what path must we walk and which fork do we take should the world be forced into this conformity should the population change because of an ideal Can one not exist on a road away from these words without the shadow of morality binding us to choice the shackles of good and evil hanging heavily upon the shoulders the shoulders of everyone, of humanity Alack, who can make the decision the one decision that can save man from dubious choice a choosing that will stop discrimination The one and final word that can bring about Utopia Even then all will exist by word but this word will bring smiles not selection does this word already exist though is there truly a being beyond good and evil --- I don't think many will be able to find this poem a good one, the greatness of it is hiding somewhere in the words not even I can find it... I just know this one says something, it carries a message on a primal level, something we can't actually grasp.. the subconscious sees this I think and not the actual conscious. Of coarse I'm most likely only thinking this because I made it and it says those kinds of things to me.
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![]() ![]() Credits: -200 | Re: The Profound Truths Quote:
I think it is a good one. I also think that the first of the two words is the one that we must follow as a civilization to follow the second would bring torment and anguish to all. | |
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![]() ![]() Credits: 1,490 | Re: The Profound Truths Flaw, this is different and beautiful. I actually felt something towards this poem. Awesome job. My only problem is the lack of punctuation. I think it would give the poem a nice flow if used correctly.
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![]() ![]() Credits: 1,176 | Re: The Profound Truths FLawEdmiNd this is simply beautiful, you really made me think of what this word is that makes humanity survive! I'm truly impressed by this poem, the flow of the poem is awesome! I agree with Kasai about punctuation, but the idea and motive behind this poem is outstanding! Keep up the good work and I'm looking foward to reading more of your work! Truly magnificent!
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