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    ''Reaching for the starts alone''

    Im a lone sunflower
    on a lone high tower
    absorving all the light
    from the sun and all life

    learning from the shallow glow
    that appears when the sun fall's
    I've seen the shine
    that the far starts alight

    even if there so small
    they just give it all they got
    to make a bright night
    to the earth when the sun

    is out of sight
    maybe is time for me
    to get out of shelter
    and follow thee
    and the knowlege i had
    earned and seen.
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    Re: ''Reaching for the starts alone''

    other than a couple grammatical mistakes you did a good job on this poem, maybe you should done it in free verse form though.(just a suggestion) Any ways good job and keep up the good work!

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    Re: ''Reaching for the starts alone''

    Are you talking about stars?
    This is confusing...

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    Re: ''Reaching for the starts alone''

    Yes he's talking about stars. He just have a few mistakes. =P Great poem though! =D
    "I love you with all my heart that I can't explain how much in words."

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