Hmm. The last verse in the first stanza seems odd to me. And you make allusions and metaphors that i simply do ot understand. Lol. However, the way you executed the poem is a refreshing way.
Shattered
Standing in the rain as water drips down my face
I look down and see my shattered reflection in a puddle
Thinking of a passionate love that once burned hot
Being put out by you attitude like a freezing wind
Thoughts of trying to regain that love no longer alive
Watching my heart and emotions being buried six feet under
A lifeless body stands there watching as the dirt piles up
No tears able to flow like a river dammed up by stone
I held you in my arms and heard you say that you loved me
But yet I see you walking holding hands with another
Walking down a red carpet that is my heart that once beat
Forever my soul shall feel an eternal hell that will never end
Then when he breaks your heart you come to me to cry
Asking me to love you once again but there is nothing left
Darkness has already set in and love has become hatred
You look into my eye and see the fires of hell burning
You realize the pain and anguish you have caused me
Now you’re holding Satan who begins to laugh in your face
The pain that once rained down on me begins to fall on you
Now you look at the puddle of your tears shattered by love
comments are welcomed, after all I am trying to become better at writing poems.
Last edited by BlueFox1; Nov 06, 2006 at 12:12 PM.
Hmm. The last verse in the first stanza seems odd to me. And you make allusions and metaphors that i simply do ot understand. Lol. However, the way you executed the poem is a refreshing way.
Seduced by Flesh
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