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*Abu Dhabi* · Oct 10, 2006, 01:31 AM

Picture.

what comes to your mind?
in this picture.

Are you dancing in the moonlight?
Are you singing to the stars?
Are you speaking to the trees?
Are you reaching to the spring?

so many things to do in a snap shot of time.

SNAP

where are you now?

SNAP

what happends next?

SNAP

Are you any different than before?

BlueFox1 · Oct 10, 2006, 02:16 AM

This poem has a different angle, but it's very interesting. I like the way you used the view of life in the form of a camera! Overall good job!

*Kasai* · Oct 10, 2006, 02:28 AM

The fact that you are asking about a certain picture, ruins it for me. Instead of saying "this" you should have identified what you were referring to.

Soldat of life · Oct 12, 2006, 10:48 PM

This practices the imagination of anyone reading this, quite a few spelling errors, but still fun to read. I don't consider this a poem though. It's like some kind of exercise to relax the mind in my opinion xD

*Abu Dhabi* · Oct 13, 2006, 12:07 AM

@SolDAT: O.O Oh? really? ^_^ that's still cool!

thanks everyone for critiqueing my poem!

BlueFox1 · Oct 13, 2006, 12:30 PM

Hey that's what AO is here for! To bring the potential of a person to the surface and help mold there talents into masterpieces!

Oct 10, 2006, 01:31 AM	#1 (permalink)
Abu Dhabi Spoken for. Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Neither here... nor there. Posts: 1,510 Thanks: 12 Thanked 15 Times in 13 Posts Credits: 6,811	Snap Picture. what comes to your mind? in this picture. Are you dancing in the moonlight? Are you singing to the stars? Are you speaking to the trees? Are you reaching to the spring? so many things to do in a snap shot of time. SNAP where are you now? SNAP what happends next? SNAP Are you any different than before? __________________ great day! . . .
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BlueFox1 Upcoming Legend Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: A place called Midnight Sun know as Tranquility Posts: 584 Thanks: 8 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts Credits: 1,176	This poem has a different angle, but it's very interesting. I like the way you used the view of life in the form of a camera! Overall good job! __________________
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Kasai Domme Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Florida Posts: 2,745 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,490	The fact that you are asking about a certain picture, ruins it for me. Instead of saying "this" you should have identified what you were referring to. __________________ Seduced by Flesh
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Soldat of life RPG Lord and Master/Poet Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: Sainte-Foy, Qc (Canada) Posts: 856 Thanks: 1 Thanked 9 Times in 9 Posts Credits: 4,612	This practices the imagination of anyone reading this, quite a few spelling errors, but still fun to read. I don't consider this a poem though. It's like some kind of exercise to relax the mind in my opinion xD __________________ Thanks to Xelhes for this amazing work of art ^.^ Poetry Corner
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Abu Dhabi Spoken for. Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Neither here... nor there. Posts: 1,510 Thanks: 12 Thanked 15 Times in 13 Posts Credits: 6,811	@SolDAT: O.O Oh? really? ^_^ that's still cool! thanks everyone for critiqueing my poem! __________________ great day! . . .
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BlueFox1 Upcoming Legend Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: A place called Midnight Sun know as Tranquility Posts: 584 Thanks: 8 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts Credits: 1,176	Hey that's what AO is here for! To bring the potential of a person to the surface and help mold there talents into masterpieces! __________________
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