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 | Sorry, I Love You this poem i made is inspired by my experience... choosing between friendship and love... hmm.. feel free to post comments^^ i posted it here also, for my co-poetry ninjas to read  Sorry, I love you We’ve been friends since childhood, Until the time we came to adulthood, We’ve been together since times of play, Until the time came to us for serious play. We’ve been supporting each other In everything we opted to do, We’ve been shoulders to cry on, When life seemed to be cruel. We’ve known each other’s secrets, Keeping them with no regrets, Until the time came on me, Intimate feelings for you I hid. Everytime we’ve been together, My heart seemed to pound so strong, Everytime we are apart from each other, My heart seemed to grow fonder. Now I’m in front of you, My flame of courage starts burning, Not knowing how to say the words I’ve been longing to say. “Sorry, I love you” Is what I want to say, Will this end our friendship, Or this will start an intimate relationship?
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Sep 16, 2006, 11:00 PM
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| Re: Sorry, I Love You Love...love...l..o..v..e.. I think this is very clear and the rhymes don't hide or hinder the message. Out of subject: You were online and didn't say hi while I was on too!!!! Back on subject: I hope love can always be seem as it is...whatever it may be...wherever it may hide. Good night poetry ninja, may your love be at peace for tonight... This is a writing that is meant to be understood without any chances of misunderstandings...I think, yet often poetry is meant to be unique for each reader. I guess that's why we can never truly put a name on everything we write...that's why I call what I write my writings/poems/thoughts/thingies XD Good night AO and may you all feel life well whatever happens... P.S.: I am very tired and just finished watching for the 3rd or 4th time "Finding Neverland", if you haven't seen that movie, go see it now!!!! It's getting old,but still, it's good!!! zzz..z..z...z.z.z.zzzZZZ!!!!
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Sep 16, 2006, 11:46 PM
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| Re: Sorry, I Love You ^^ thanks maxime for posting your comment ^^ it is highly appreciated. Also, good nighty, may you sleep tight. i was not able to say hello a while ago, i was in a hurry. about finding neverland, i've heard about it, and i would find time to watch it. ^^ < just finished eating lunch
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Sep 17, 2006, 12:04 AM
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| Re: Sorry, I Love You Thanks for your comment Pride_Edward ^^ it is sincerely appreciated.
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Sep 17, 2006, 10:53 AM
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| Re: Sorry, I Love You We’ve known each other’s secrets, Keeping them with no regrets, Until the time came on me, Intimate feelings for you I hid. The transitional stanza. The third line? The wording is almost too much, IMO. I also thought the ending would have been a bit bettr. Other thanthat? Wonderful poem. In fact, I enjoyed it.
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Sep 17, 2006, 08:56 PM
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| Re: Sorry, I Love You love the design, rime and the anime pic... and it has a lot of love around it si. 
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Sep 18, 2006, 03:19 AM
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| Re: Sorry, I Love You Thanks sensei Kasai and Baal for commenting on my poem. ^^ <about the ending... well, i was thinking twice before... if it will be it... waheheh! i was thinking if a put a little something... i can't just put it into words. ^^
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