Hmmm. You gave me a straight to the point poem. I wouldve liked to see what made these emotions rise. Other than that? I like the way you write poetry.
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People’s opinion clash like thunder and lightning
Striking the ground putting fear into hearts of many
Words of warmth and kindness thrown like daggers
Stabbing the hearts of the kind and unadulterated
Eyes of the innocent become teary and clouded
Tears that were pure now begin to bleed red
The unadulterated begin to shed their skins
Like a serpent beginning anew life before it strikes
The never ending cycle or heartache and grief
Resumes once more as does life and death
Piercing the mind like a needle does the skin
Reality like a drug it numbs and soon sets in
I'm having writers block so bare with me on this one. Comments and critiques are welcomed
Hmmm. You gave me a straight to the point poem. I wouldve liked to see what made these emotions rise. Other than that? I like the way you write poetry.
Seduced by Flesh
By this did you mean elaborate more on imagery or just letting the emotions flow more to form a picture for the reader to understand where I was coming from?
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