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![]() ![]() | Untitled Untitled People’s opinion clash like thunder and lightning Striking the ground putting fear into hearts of many Words of warmth and kindness thrown like daggers Stabbing the hearts of the kind and unadulterated Eyes of the innocent become teary and clouded Tears that were pure now begin to bleed red The unadulterated begin to shed their skins Like a serpent beginning anew life before it strikes The never ending cycle or heartache and grief Resumes once more as does life and death Piercing the mind like a needle does the skin Reality like a drug it numbs and soon sets in I'm having writers block so bare with me on this one. Comments and critiques are welcomed
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![]() ![]() | Re: Untitled Hmmm. You gave me a straight to the point poem. I wouldve liked to see what made these emotions rise. Other than that? I like the way you write poetry.
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![]() ![]() | Re: Untitled By this did you mean elaborate more on imagery or just letting the emotions flow more to form a picture for the reader to understand where I was coming from?
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