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    Why do you love me?

    Why do you love me?

    Why me?
    How can you love me?
    Do I mean a lot to you?

    For me you cried
    To me you gave your heart
    To me I do not deserve you

    I hate the way I am
    I cannot believe how I am
    Again, I am locking myself away

    My barriers have arisen
    I am shutting myself down
    I feel its best to be on my own

    I love you and
    You know it but yet
    Why do you love me?

    Why not leave me behind?
    Although I hold on to you
    I do not want to lose my hold

    I am scared to hurt you
    I am scared to leave you
    I am scared to just lose you

    Do I deserve you?
    Is it an illusion?
    Or a dream I will wake up to?

    I just want to end all doubts
    I want to be with you
    However, why does it seem I do not deserve you?

    At least you know I love you
    I am happy that you love me too
    Forever I want to last between us
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    Re: Why do you love me?

    A sad poem filled with emotions,
    Emotions caused by many questions,
    Questions by a inner cold core,
    A cold core that thinks what love is in store.

    <i liked your poem and the descriptions. i was interested in reading it.

    There are moments,
    That i do not wish to love,
    To hurt myselft not,
    To hurt other people not...

    <hmmm... you poem really strucked me because it has something to do with my own questions in mind... i love the way you make those words flow so beautifully. ^^ the stanzas there... i made for my perception of your poem. ^^
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    Re: Why do you love me?

    Do I deserve you?
    Is it an illusion?
    Or a dream I will wake up to?

    hmph (concentrate)

    it's great to know that theres people that think that other love is dream or a lie cuz ur scared to hurt or be hurted...
    u allways make nice love or sad poems
    and there great.



    perdoname michelle!

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    Re: Why do you love me?

    Thank you. Glad ya'll like it *smiles happily*
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    Re: Why do you love me?

    That was real good Hieis. I liked it alot.

    But this passage doesnt make much sense and should be rewritten:

    Why not leave me behind?
    Although I hold on to you
    I do not want to lose my hold


    And after that the rest of the poem fell apart. Either you should cut it off after that or should see what fits. Because it seemed like it was forced to be longer or that the feeling of this poem became weak. But i love the beginning, very well written.

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    Re: Why do you love me?

    Maybe it was forced upon because the person wanted to make the feeling last longer, as if it was important to do so. I sometimes write things that are longer than usual because I have things to say.

    Though I agree that there is a feeling of repetition after what Nympho highlighted in her post. I think it's quite nice, but love can only be expressed so many times. Iguess we are all obsessed with the idea of love :P

    I'm sure you can improve on your way of writing, as there is feeling in there, but I don't feel as much as I'd like to from a poem. But hey....it's just me...it's great so simply keep up the good work xD
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    Re: Why do you love me?

    great one including the color! ^_^

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